Talk:Bermuda at the 2018 Winter Olympics/GA1

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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 06:04, 21 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"This was the nation's eighth appearance in the Winter Olympics." Bermuda is not a nation.
"cross-country skier Tucker Murphy. He finished his only event in 104th place." Merge to "cross-country skier Tucker Murphy, who finished his only event in 104th place."
made their Winter Olympic Games debut in 1992 at the Albertville Games; and have appeared in every Olympics since their respective debuts bar one" Replace semicolon with comma.
"THe delegation also consisted of Murphy's coach, Pepa Miloucheva; his waxer Jeff Shaw; the chef de mission Lawrence Murphy; and Sean Field-Lament, who represented the Bermuda Olympic Association's executive board." Use commas instead of semicolon and fix the first word.
", and for the closing ceremony." No need for comma.
Remove third link to Tucker Murphy in prose, unnecessary for an article this short.
"Murphy made his third straight appearance at the Winter Olympics. He was 36 years old at the time of these Olympics." Merge the two sentences.
"He finished the men's 15 km freestyle in a time of 43 minutes and 5 seconds, which was good for 104th place. He was more than nine minutes behind the gold medallist, Dario Cologna of Switzerland." Same here.

Thanks for the review, Nova Crystallis, everything has been taken care of! Courcelles (talk) 23:52, 21 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]