Talk:Bennet C. Riley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 06:05, 24 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Rename the section as "Early life and family".
Para 1; sentence 1; Consider replacing the word "parents" with "couple", because they were not parents before the subject was born, they were just a couple. Also add "an" before "Irish-Catholic". In the latter of the sentence, there is no need to mention the deaths of his parents, because is completely out of the context. Please remove that.
Para 1; sentence 2; "Early in life" can be replaced by "Earlier", better wording.
Para 2; sentence 1; Why are two prepositions "in" and "at"used consecutively for the same thing. Correct this.
Para 2; note 2; The note about his children must be cut down as it is not about the subject.
Para 2; In latter of this para, it was mentioned about the physical appearance. In every instance it was mentioned as "him". "him" refers to who, "Bennet Riley", the subject, or "Edward Bishop Dudley Riley", his child. Please be clear.
Para 2; (") was used, but never closed.

Para 1; Link "War of 1812" to its article (Though it was linked in the lead, it must be done in the sections once. This is not considered as duplicate link).
Para 4; "..... in the San Patricios convent, among them John Murphy and John Riley...", add "were" after "among them".

Para 1; sentence 1; Remove the capitalization of "War" in "After the War with Mexico, ...", because it is not the name of the war.
Para 1; sentence 1; Link "Fort Hamilton" to its article.
Para 2; sentence 4, 5; Reword the sentences as General Riley died on the evening of 10 June 1853,^[9] survived by his wikfe Arabella (died on 12 February 1894) and four children.^[17]

- Thankyou! all corrections made or the article tweaked to incorporate your comments. I've kept the notes about the children, especially Edward, whose career was controversial and typical of many 1840s/1850s graduates of West Point. auntieruth (talk) 14:07, 26 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Did some few edits, all good to go.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: