Talk:Benjamin Loxley house/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 10:04, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

• It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
• It contains copyright infringements -
• It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
• It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Prose

Lede

• The house is noted in history - fluff. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:48, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• Quaker Patriot- what is a Quaker? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:26, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

• The house is also noteworthy because of its unique architectural design - fluff. We shouldn't be telling the user what is notable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:26, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

• renowned - PROMO. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:26, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

• Lede seems a little short. The actual bit of importance is the overhearing on the army plans, so I'd start with that. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:29, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• Lede doesn't cover anything about it not being there anymore. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:30, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:46, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

General

• The body should really start with the location first. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:33, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• The infobox seems a bit bare to me, do they usually look like that? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• Notoriety is a weird section head.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• The house is notable as the residency of Quaker Lydia Darragh, a Patriot spy. - yeah, there are much better ways to say that. same as lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• One version of the historical record, which matches that told by her daughter Ann - is there a second version of the record? What type of record is this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:07, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• Images could do with a circa, Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:15, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• Philadelphia.[28][38][39][40] - WP:CITEKILL. three is plenty. If you need four, use WP:BUNDLING. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

• Demise is a tiny section, could we not merge this? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 12:36, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

•  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:01, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

• I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:04, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

 Working Thanks for review. I'll start working on the issues. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:16, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

@Lee Vilenski: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:14, 12 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy to pass. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 14:50, 14 March 2021 (UTC)