Talk:Ben Lugmore/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:56, 3 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

The lead is a little short. I would also expect to see all those refs in the main body rather than in the lead. Done - fixed refs so they are all from the body; expanded text
a "horseshoe-shaped" massif - this doesn't need to be a quote as it's purely factual. Done
"anglicization" British English -> anglicisation. Done
I would look to merge the naming/geology sections as the former is just a single sentence. Not done - am going to expand these two sections slightly, they also mirror a format used on much of the Irish mountains?
" the Mweelrea Formation, and " why italics? Our article doesn't do that. Done
" are tufts, " again, why italics? Done
In the infobox, spaces between the facts and references should go. That may be a template issue which needs fixing. Not done - it is a template thing (I have taken out any space possible and still no effect?)
Geography section is a series of single-sentence paragraphs which is too proseline for me. Done - may not have fully addressed this but tried to combine into paragraphs and expanded some text.
Corrie is not linked first time in the main part of the article. Done
"of the "horseshoe" that " again, not needed in quotes really. Done
"sharp "airy" summit " according to whom? This quote may be applicable but to whom is it attributed? Done - Provided attribution (two authors use it)
"is thus like of a " odd phrasing, what about "is like that of a"? Done
"100 Highest Irish Mountains," this is in italics in the article and not italics in the infobox. Done
"6-kilometre" convert. Done
"13-kilometre" ditto. Done
In fact there are several conversions needed in this section. Done
" a notable Irish guidebook" if it's notable, can we say what it is? Does it have an article? Done - It doesn't have an article (perhaps might do later), however, have taken out "notable", and also added another guidebook that lists it as a top three.
"(or point 495-metres)." what does this mean? Done - clarified that it is a point on the OS map
" (e.g. above The Ramp)," e.g.? Done - better wording
"VS to E2" you explained terms like D before, so these need explanining. Done
Some of the see also links are already linked in the article (e.g. list of Marilyns). Done
Ref 7 has a spare quote mark. Done
Refs seem to be hard-split, just let {{reflist}} do its thing unmodified. Done
"Mayo - A Walking" should be an en-dash in both places. Done
"DoBIH" is overlinked. Done

That's it for first pass. On hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:31, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Respond

Thank you for that The Rambling Man, which all made sense to me. I think I have addressed them all, except that I would likt to keep the naming and geology sections separate as it follows the format used by other Irish mountains and I have a little more to contribute in each one? Also, the infobox spacing appears to be a template thing. Thanks again for your attention ! Britishfinance (talk) 10:33, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Just realising that I have not fixed the lede (your first point), which am doing now. Britishfinance (talk) 11:34, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done this now. Britishfinance (talk) 11:49, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All good, I removed a bunch of duplicate links and a spare </ref>, but I'm happy with the article so promoting. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:13, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Much appreciated :) Britishfinance (talk) 12:14, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]