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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:19, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I know you are not that active anymore but try to respond to changes once I suggest them in this review --K. Peake 08:19, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Cover arts need alt text
  • Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
  • WP:OVERLINK of Billie Eilish under songwriters
  • Finneas O'Connell → Finneas under producers
  • Note that the song's title is stylised in lower case also
  • "by American singer Billie Eilish." → "by American singer Billie Eilish from her debut EP, Don't Smile At Me (2017)." with the wikilink
  • "was released on" → "was released as the EP's second single on" with the target
  • "and Finneas O'Connell, with production handled" → "and Finneas O'Connell, with production being handled" with the wikilink
  • ""Bellyache" is a midtempo electropop" → "A midtempo electropop" with the target
  • "R&B song, with hip hop," → "R&B song, it has hip hop," with the target
  • Why is there no sentence about critical reception as the last sentence of this para?
  • "The track was accompanied by a music video released" → "The song was accompanied by a music video, which was released" with the wikilink
  • "it depicts Eilish in" → "Eilish is depicted in"
  • "It entered the top 100 in" → "The song entered the top 100 of charts in"
  • "It was given double platinum certification by" → "It was certified double platinum in Australia, the United States, and Mexico by"
  • "and Mexican Association of Producers of Phonograms and Videograms, A.C. (AMPROFON)." → "and Mexican Association of Producers of Phonograms and Videograms, A.C. (AMPROFON), respectively."
  • "included the track on" → "included the song on"
  • "and 2020" → "and her 2020"

Background and release

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  • "on Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me through" → "from Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me, through"
  • "Finneas O'Connell, the latter of which solely produced" → "Finneas O'Connell, known under his stage name of Finneas, with him solely producing"
  • "was handled by the studio personnel" → "were handled by studio personnel"
  • "stated that "Garbage", by" → "stated that "Garbage" (2013) by American rapper"
  • "for the song. "Garbage was" → "for the song: "'Garbage' was"
  • "It’s more graphic" → "It's more graphic"
  • "he’s been my" → "he's been my"
  • "A remix was" → "A remix of the song was"
  • "And that the" → "He continued, writing that the"

Composition and lyrics

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  • Target midtempo to Tempo
  • Target R&B to Contemporary R&B
  • "It has influences" → "It has influences of"
  • "deep house and Latin macabre" → "deep house, and Latin macabre"
  • Target key to Key (music)
  • "at a moderate tempo" → "with a moderate tempo"
  • Remove wikilink on beats per minute
  • Wikilink acoustic guitar
  • Target chorus to Refrain
  • Target synth to Synthesizer
  • Where is the mention of synths?
  • "mentions that" → "mentioned that"
  • Wikilink pre-chorus per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "by her childhood guilt she felt" → "by the childhood guilt Eilish felt"
  • "said that is about" → "said that the song is about"
  • "about a psychopath who kills those close to her," → "of a psychopath who kills those she is close to,"
  • "who's killed her friends" → "who has killed her friends"
  • ""Sittin' all alone..." the lyrics are not backed up by the citation
  • ""Maybe it's in the gutter..." same issue as above
  • "lyrics also reference the film" → "lyrics reference action film"
  • Add release year of the film in brackets
  • ""My V is for Vendetta..." the lyrics are not backed up by the citation

Critical reception

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  • "received mostly positive reviews" → "was met with mostly positive reviews"
  • Target pop to Pop music
  • "mentions that whiile" → "noted that while Eilish's 2016 singles"
  • Remove target on pop in this sentence
  • "and mentions that it would be become" → "and admitted it would become"
  • "Mark Savage, lauded the song" → "Mark Savage lauded the song"
  • Target trap to Trap music
  • "And further mentions that" → "He elaborated, mentioning that"
  • "She concludes that it is" → "Almedia concluded by calling the song"
  • "remarked it as" → "described it as"
  • "The song placed" → "The song was placed"
  • "on Inisder's Every Billie Eilish song, ranked," → "on Inisder's Every Billie Eilish song, ranked list," per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "and "dark" and that they" → "and "dark", commenting that they"
  • "and cites Eilish and Finneas" → "and prove Eilish and Finneas"

Commercial performance

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  • "it peaked at number three" → "though it peaked at number three"
  • "of two million units based on sales and streams." → "of 2,000,000 certified units in the United States."
  • "number 66 on the ARIA Charts." → "number 66 on the ARIA Singles Chart."
  • "certification from the" → "certification by the"
  • "gold certification from the" → "gold certification by the"
  • "in the country." → "in the UK."
  • "platinum certification from" → "platinum certification by"

Music video

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  • Img needs alt text and wikilink music video on the main text
  • "An accompanying music video for "Bellyache" was" → "An accompanying music video was" with the wikilink
  • "to Eilish's official YouTube channel" → "to Eilish's YouTube channel" with the wikilink
  • "it shows Eilish being stranded" → "Eilish is shown stranded"
  • "is dressed head to toe" → "is dressed from head to toe"
  • "It begins with Eilish walking" → "The video begins with Eilish walking"
  • Where is this sentence backed up?
  • "Eilish begins to recount" → "Eilish starts to recount"
  • "she has done." → "she has done,"
  • "forgetting about it." → "forgetting about it:"
  • "she throws dollar bills" → "Eilish throws dollar bills"
  • Where is this sentence backed up?

user:Kyle Peake, in the V source. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:50, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • "police officer eating a donut" → "police officer who is eating a donut"
  • Target Baton to Baton (law enforcement)
  • Where is this sentence backed up?
  • "Ian David Monroe writing for V magazine described" → "Ian David Monroe, writing for V magazine, described"
  • "compared Eilish's looks in the" → "compared Eilish's look in the"
  • "from the 2003 American film" → "in the 2003 American film"
  • "the choreography, saying" → "the choreography, saying that"
  • Target Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "auctioned the yellow rain suit and jacket in February 2020 for 12,000 dollars."→ "auctioned an yellow rain suit and jacket nearly identical to the outfit worn by Eilish in the music video for 12,000 dollars in February 2020."
  • "Eilish's name is signed" → "Eilish's full name is signed"
  • Target Grammy award to Grammy Award

Live performances and other usage

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  • "Eilish has performed..." remove since a section makes this obvious
  • Target acoustic to Acoustic music
  • "in the June of that year." → "in June of that year."
  • "on her live album" → "as part of her live album"
  • "In December 2019, Eilish performed "Ilomilo"..." remove this sentence as it is totally off-topic
  • "was also included on the setlist" → "was later included on the setlists"
  • "and Where Do We Go? World Tour (2020)." → "and her Where Do We Go? World Tour (2020)."
  • "Norwegian singer Sigrid, covered" → "Norwegian singer Sigrid covered"
  • "for the P3 session." → "for Sveriges Radio's P3 session." with the wikilink and target
  • "and features Sigrid" → "and noted that it features Sigrid"

Track listing

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  • Retitle to Track listings

Personnel

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  • Credits adapted from the album's liner notes. → Credits adapted from the EP's liner notes.
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

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Weekly charts

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  • The chart positions on the left should be under this sub-section, as you have the year-end charts one on the right

Year-end charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks fine at 36.7%
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Worldwide digital release of "Bellyache": → Citations regarding the digital release of "Bellyache": on ref 1
  • iTunes Store → iTunes Store (CR) on ref 4
  • Authors should have the last name followed by first on ref 15 and target Insider to Insider (website) per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Target Complex to Complex (magazine) on ref 33 per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • WP:OVERLINK of Variety on ref 43
  • MOS:QWQ issues with refs 44 and 45
  • Cite Gaon Chart as publisher instead for ref 52 and target to Gaon Music Chart
  • WP:OVERLINK of Associação Fonográfica Portuguesa on ref 58
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Kyle Peake, thank you so much for the review! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 04:50, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss Sorry about replying later; I went offline after responding to your review of "Wash Us in the Blood". ✓ Pass for this article now though! --K. Peake 07:47, 15 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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