Talk:Behavioral medicine
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medicine needs to be capitalized in this title. I am not sure how to do this but may take the time later to figure it out. If you know how to the please change it. Dkriegls 08:37, 20 November 2006 (UTC) Done Dkriegls 09:33, 12 December 2006 (UTC)
- Unless I'm missing something, the second word in the title should not be capitalized, per WP:NAME. I'm going to post this at WP:RM to move it back to Behavioral medicine. -- Cielomobile talk / contribs 19:23, 11 June 2007 (UTC)
Requested move
[edit]Behavioral Medicine → Behavioral medicine — The second word should not be capitalized, per WP:CAPS. I would have marked this as uncontroversial, but another user felt at one point that the whole title should be capitalized, as seen on the talk page. —-- Cielomobile talk / contribs 19:34, 11 June 2007 (UTC)
This is uncontroversial. This article has been renamed from Behavioral Medicine to behavioral medicine as the result of a move request. --Stemonitis 10:11, 12 June 2007 (UTC)
I am editing this page for an undergraduate psychology course. To view the latest version of my rough draft, click here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tawhite2013/sandbox Tawhite2013 (talk) 23:36, 24 April 2013 (UTC)
Lindy Edits
[edit]- I would lengthen the origins and history section, or combine it with another section. It seems too short to have its own section
- Provide definitions/ explanations for telemonitoring and case management
- Under doctor-patient relationship, I would rely less on bullets. I think your page could benefit by you eliminating many of the bullets, and turning those into fully explained ideas
- In your explanation under “physician well being,” you conclude it with (Feldman review). I’m guessing this is a citation, so make sure you cite it correctly
- Provide a link to the International Society of Behavioral Medicine, if there is one
- Add a space between “annualconferences”
Great job Taylor! I had very few edits Lindy.williams (talk) 21:05, 1 May 2013 (UTC)
"PSY 401 C: Peer Review for Taylor White"
[edit](a) Progress #: 5
(b) Much more information and sections than in the previous article. You also actually cite sources to substantiate your findings. You improved the introduction section by making it clearer, concise and link out to other sources.
(c)
- In the first paragraph, the sentence starting with “The practice of behavioral medicine” is a long list and could be broken down into two sentences to ensure comprehension. Perhaps place the portion of the sentence starting with “aspects of occupational therapy, rehabilitation medicine…” could be a part of the second sentence.
- Topics in Behavioral Medicine
- It may be helpful if you were to provide an overview sentence of the different topics in behavioral medicine before making subsections of each.
- Additionally, all of the topics you outline are a little too technical and for someone who knows nothing about Behavioral medicine this can be a little overwhelming.
- Behavior-related illnesses
- Typo in the sentence: “Many chronic disease” It should be “Many chronic diseases”
- I am confused by what you mean by “Many chronic diseases have a behavioral component, but the following illnesses can be significantly and directly modified by behavior, as opposed to using medicine alone” Do you mean to say that behavioral interventions may be better equipped to treat chronic disease than the field of medicine? It may be less confusing if you were to use pharmacological intervention instead of medicine if you are referring to medication/drugs when you say “medicine” in this sentence.
- Treatment adherence and compliance
- The examples in this section are great but you leave the interpretation of how these examples apply to the reader. Expand on them a little. I would probably make this less bulleted and in-text. You could start this off with “Some examples of appropriate reinforcement include telemonitoring and case management.” If there is a link that could further explain these and that would be sufficient to explain how these apply, then you could just wikilink to them.
- Doctor-patient relationship
- I am uncertain as to the bullets in this section. You outline communication and physician well-being as being components of the doctor-patient relationship but do not expand on how the sub-bullets such as "Interviewing ‘difficult’ patients” apply to behavioral medicine. I really like the idea of outlining and making it visually appealing, but you are being too concise here for this section as a whole.
(d)
- I would provide more wikilinks to the various science you list like epidemiology that are related to behavioral medicine.
- I would perhaps provide more information on the academic forebears and just expand on the history some more if you could. Like two or three more sentences to give it some more for people to look at.
- The paragraph beginning with “Other areas…” and “The International Society…” after the Doctor-patient relationship subsection could probably go with your general statement for the Topics in Behavioral Medicine section before you delve into the specific topics you decided to expand on.
(e) Readability #: 4
(f) I think this is a great start and you definitely are taking this article in the right direction, especially since it was very bare minimum when you started with it. Nathalya Cubas (talk) 21:48, 2 May 2013 (UTC)
WikiProject Medicine
[edit]I noticed that you, @Plastikspork:, reverted my addition of the WikiProject Medicine Tag (https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Behavioral_medicine&oldid=1153146584). I thought that this was a clear cut addition for something that WikiProject Medicine would be interested in. Could you walk me through your reasoning why it doesn't belong?