Talk:Beat of My Drum/GA3
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 17:57, 30 January 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Info box
[edit]- Provide a caption for the alt parameter, explaining what is it on the artwork.
- Use {{Start date|2011|06|03}} for the release date. Done
- Use {{Duration|m=2|s=56}} for the length of the song. Done
- Songwriters actual names should be used for the Songwriter parameter Done
Lead
[edit]Resolved comments
- → "Beat of My Drum" is a song by British recording artist Nicola Roberts, from her debut album Cinderella's Eyes (2011). It was released as her debut single on 3 June 2011, via Polydor Records.
- Again, writers should have their actual names listed. So, Diplo should be Thomas Pentz.
- "However, the production was unsuccessful, and Roberts contacted Diplo, who then assisted, producing the final version of the song" → This could be better.
- Do you want me to c/e the lead? Because It needs to be rewritten.
- If you feel it needs to be re-written, go for it. But User:J Milburn c/e the entire article pretty throughly and I think it looks pretty good. But you are the reviewer so it's up to you! -FeuDeJoie (talk) 17:40, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
- I've got absolutely no objection to copyediting going ahead. The article's not perfect. J Milburn (talk) 18:01, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
- Okay. Also, could you perhaps put a Done next to points you have...done please? I see you have done the info box points by looking at the revision history, but I wouldn't have known otherwise. Thanks. Aaron • You Da One 18:10, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
- OKay. I will do this last. Aaron • You Da One 13:29, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
- I have done a c/e.
- OKay. I will do this last. Aaron • You Da One 13:29, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
- Okay. Also, could you perhaps put a Done next to points you have...done please? I see you have done the info box points by looking at the revision history, but I wouldn't have known otherwise. Thanks. Aaron • You Da One 18:10, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
- I've got absolutely no objection to copyediting going ahead. The article's not perfect. J Milburn (talk) 18:01, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
Background and development
[edit]Resolved comments
- "Before starting her solo career, Roberts was one fifth of the girl band Girls Aloud." → The band hasn't split up, they are still together.
- "The experience led her to start to develop her debut album,[2] which, lyrically, reflected the difficult times she experienced in Girls Aloud." → Bad phrasing.
- To be honest, this section needs copy-editing too. The flow is really bad. Aaron • You Da One 14:10, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
- I've done a c/e. Aaron • You Da One 12:46, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
Release and reception
[edit]Resolved comments
- "on air on sale" → What are the quotation marks here for? Done
- method on 3 June 2011, the way that Universal Records, by which Polydor is owned, were releasing all of their new work at this time. → method on 3 June 2011. Universal Music, the record company which owns Polydor, were releasing all singles under this format at the time of "Beat of my Drum"'s release. Done
- A means of combatting illegal downloading, the method was new to Roberts. → The reason for this was to try and reduce the level of illegal downloading of music, a system that Roberts was not used to. Done
- After her time in Girls Aloud, she was used to releasing a song after around six weeks of promotion, including radio, television and print. → As part of promoting singles in Girls Aloud, she was used to releasing a song after approximately six weeks of promotion, which included radio interviews, televised performances and print work. Done
- She said it was "very scary" to release a song without this publicity. Further, Roberts was concerned about the effect of this kind of release on chart positions. → As a result, Roberts stated that that the new system was "very scary" as she was not used to releasing a song with comparatively little publicity, and worried about how her "Beat of My Drum" and subsequent singles would chart. Done
- In an interview published by Digital Spy, she said "I think it's harder for the public now because it's always been about the chart position. I also think it takes the excitement out of the charts because it's not a competition anymore."[8] → What does this have to do with the release? Done
- Is the entire first paragraph support by that one reference (FN8) at the end? You should put a reference at the end of each sentence really, because at the moment it just reads like WP:OR. Done
- The song has received positive reviews from critics. → "Beat of My Drum" garnered positive reviews from music critics. Done
- Robert Copsey, writing for Digital Spy, gave the song → Robert Copsey for Digital Spy gave the song Done
- A writer from website → Remove "website" Done
- Lots of quotes, paraphrase some please.
- Dean Piper of → Dean Piper for Done
- Michael Cragg, writing for The Guardian, → Michael Cragg for The Guardian Done
- in the United Kingdom → Remove Done
Accolades
[edit]- It's only a short section so I copy-edited it.
Music video
[edit]- I'm just going to c/e this one as well.
- Need an alt description for the picture.
- Need a source for Morgan as the director.
- Make sure you include sources at the end of sentences.
Live performances
[edit]- Roberts performed the song on 2011's T4 on the Beach, and this was her first live solo performance. → Roberts performed "Beat of My Drum" for the first time at the 2011 T4 on the Beach in the United Kingdom.
- Asked whether she was nervous about the performance, she said she had → After her performance, the singer was asked how she felt it went, saying
- I did a slight c/e of this section.
Formats and track-listings
[edit]Resolved comments
- Remove the templates to make (iTunes pre-order bonus track) small. Looks out of place as everything else is normal size font apart from the writers for "Disco Blisters and a Comedown". Done
Charts
[edit]- Change section title to "Chart performance" Done
- Make a subsection entitled "Charts" Done
- Put a comma after "United Kingdom" Done
- the song → "Beat of My Drum" Done
- on
the issue date of18 June 2011. Done - Put a comma after "week" Done
- Put a comma after "64" Done
- and continued falling in its third week placing at number 88. → and fell to number 88 in its third week.
- falling is the present tense, fell is the past. This happened in the past. Plus, it makes more sense to read. Aaron • You Da One
- Put a comma after "However" Done
- on 16 July 2011, the fourth week it rose to number 76 and again in its fifth week where it charted at number 50. → the song rose to number 76 in its fourth week, and again to number 50 in its fifth. Done
- the single → the song Done
- on the chart, → on that countries singles chart, Done
- date for Ireland? Done
Release history
[edit]Resolved comments
- Link CD single Done
- Link Polydor Records Done
References
[edit]- First, the dates and accessdates should be written in a British English format, i.e 2 July 2011. Apply this to each and every reference.
- FN1: Should be |work=[[The Sun (United Kingdom)|The Sun]]|publisher=[[News International]]
- FN2: Should be |work=[[The Guardian]]|publisher=Guardian News and Media
- FN3: Should be |work=''[[Digital Spy]]''|publisher=[[Hachette Filipacchi Médias]]
- FN4: Should be |work=''[[MTV News]]''|publisher=[[Viacom]]
- FN6: Should be |work=''Digital Spy''|publisher=Hachette Filipacchi Médias (No linking as this is the second occurrence of Digital Spy in the references)
- FN7: Should be |work=''MTV News''|publisher=Viacom (No linking as this is the second occurrence of MTV in the references)
- FN8: Should be |work=''Digital Spy''|publisher=Hachette Filipacchi Médias (No linking as this is the third occurrence of Digital Spy in the references)
- FN9: Should be |work=[[Billboard (magazine)|Billboard]]|publisher=[[Prometheus Global Media]]
- FN10: Should be |work=''[[Popjustice]]''|publisher=Peter Robinson
- FN11: Should be |work=[[Daily Mirror]]|publisher=[[Trinity Mirror]]
- FN12: Should be |work=The Guardian|publisher=Guardian News and Media (No linking as this is the second occurrence of The Guardian in the references)
- FN13: Should be |work=[[Metro (British newspaper)|Metro]]|publisher=[[Associated Newspapers]]
- FN14: Should be |work=Metro|publisher=Associated Newspapers (No linking as this is the second occurrence of Metro in the references)
- FN15: Should be |work=Daily Mirror|publisher=Trinity Mirror (No linking as this is the second occurrence of Daily Mirror in the references)
- FN16: Should be |work=''MTV News''|publisher=Viacom (No linking as this is the third occurrence of MTV in the references)
- FN17: Should be |work=Billboard|publisher=Prometheus Global Media (No linking as this is the second occurrence of Billboard in the references)
- FN18: Should be |work=The Guardian|publisher=Guardian News and Media (No linking as this is the third occurrence of The Guardian in the references)
- FN20: Should be |work=''MTV News''|publisher=Viacom (No linking as this is the fourth occurrence of MTV in the references)
- FN21: Should be |work=''MTV News''|publisher=Viacom (No linking as this is the fifth occurrence of MTV in the references)
- FN22: Should be |work=[[Daily Mail]]|publisher=[[Daily Mail and General Trust]]
- FN23: Should be |work=''Digital Spy''|publisher=Hachette Filipacchi Médias (No linking as this is the third occurrence of Digital Spy in the references)
- FN24: Should be |work=[[BBC News]]|publisher=[[BBC]]
- FN25: Should be |work=''[[iTunes Store]] (United Kingdom)''|publisher=[[Apple Inc.|Apple]]
- FN32: Should be |work=''iTunes Store (Ireland)''|publisher=Apple (No linking as this is the second occurrence of iTunes in the references)
Summary
[edit]The references are pretty bad to be honest. It warrants a fail. But I will place on hold for 7 days. Aaron • You Da One 12:36, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
- Sorry but I am failing the article. 7 days have passed without an improvement. The references are quite poor and is a grounds for a fail in itself. If you amend this concerns when it best suits you are re-nominate, it should pass with next to no concerns. Aaron • You Da One 12:39, 12 March 2012 (UTC)