Talk:Be Like Me/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 16:51, 10 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

is a song by American rapper Lil Pump, which features Lil Wayne → is a song by American rappers Lil Pump and Lil Wayne
Lil Wayne is not a lead artist
and release for digital download in the US as the album's seventh single on February 21 → and released for digital download in the US as the album's seventh single on February 21, 2019
Which labels conducted the release?
Who wrote the song? Please name all songwriters
Lil Pump calls out the rappers jacking his style, while Lil Wayne looks at how he birthed a generation of them → During the song, Lil Pump calls out the rappers jacking his style, ...
Which genre is the song?
Hip hop and where should this go?
What do you mean by "jacking"? Do you mean they're copying him?
was mostly praised by music critics → shortly say what aspects the critics praised
Release year in brackets for "The Slim Shady"
Unlink US, Canada and Ireland
Lil Pump performed it → For promotion, ... (for better flow)

Done the rest

Infobox

You say the genre is "Hip hop", yet you don't state this anywhere in the article. Either remove or reference
"Lil Pump calls out those jacking his style in hip hop," This is confirmation of it being a hip hop song, as otherwise he wouldn't be doing so; you don't hear a hip hop song where Jay-Z calls out those jacking his style in pop or something like that.

@Cartoon network freak: Not every source has to directly state something for it to be included; if it is translated from the given information then I don't see why this can't be listed as hip hop. I'm not claiming it is because Lil Pump's wiki states that he is hip hop, it is because of the quote and this does give confirmation of it being hip hop, as Pump is also described as "rapping lines" so that is further evidence of the song as hip hop, since this is the purest form of rap. Therefore it can be listed. --Kyle Peake (talk) 14:28, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: I pinged one of my mutuals to help out in this situation. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:39, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Background

track list → tracklist
as one of the famous rap artists to be featured on the album → as one of the fellow rap artists to be featured on the album ("famous" is fancruft)
The song's release was preceded by Lil Pump claiming that he's "the only reason why SoundCloud exists."[2] → This information is highly unnecessary and should be removed
Rename this section to "Background and composition", unite both this and "Composition" in two paragraphs and include all songwriters of the song

Done all

Composition

Quote "bouncy"
Throughout it, Lil Pump calls out those jacking → Throughout "Be Like Me", Lil Pump calls out those jacking
such as "Everybody wanna be like → such as: "Everybody wanna be like
with the lyrics "Everybody wanna → same as above
is at the end of the track and he utilizes Lil Pump's flow. → is at the end of the track, with him utilizing Lil Pump's flow

Done all

Release and reception

as its seventh single.[8][6][9] → refs not in numerical order
"Be Like Me" was released as the twelfth track → "Be Like Me" is the twelfth track
album Harverd Dropout on February 22, 2019. → album Harverd Dropout, released on February 22, 2019.
He had shared a photo of the track list via Twitter two days prior to release, which revealed it as the twelfth track.[1] → Highly unncessary; we already know the position on the tracklist and we don't want to know anything more about the album since this should focus on "Be Like Me" only

Done all

Music video

The music video was officially released → No need to start the section that abruptly. Rewrite to: "An accompanying music video for "Be Like Me" was released ("officially" is superfluous)
as Eminem's music video for → state "clip" or "visual" to avoid repetiton of words
Release year for "The Slim Shady" in brackets
and Lil Pump tweeted out "IM THE REAL SLIM SHADY" as promotion for the video → this is no promotion in that sense and can thus be removed
Does he only respond in the music video or does the song itself also contain that phrase?
Video only
look-a-likes → look-alikes
Link "Styrofoam"
when rapping, while he is reflected in multiple mirrors → while rapping or being reflected in multiple mirrors
Rename this section into "Music video and promotion" and also include the bit about the live performance here
(jumping into the live performance section now)

Lil Pump performed "Be Like Me" → For further promotion, ...
with him breaking a banner, with confetti raining → with him breaking a banner and confetti raining
cheer leaders → cheerleaders

Done all

Commercial performance

Include this bit in the "Release and reception" section
It's 4 sentences/3 lines and the section is already two paragraphs so this is notable.
on the US Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart → on the US Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs charts (since your talking about both charts)
The track fell down → "descended" is more encyclopedic
The track charted at number 47 → The track further charted at number 47 (for better flow)

Done for the rest

Track listing

Fine

Credits and personnel

Fine

Charts

Fine

Release history

Fine

Other things

17.4% is a very good perecentage for copyviolation
The given references seem to back up the assertions made in this article, as far as I've checked them
No dead links
Ref #20 is not formatted correctly

Done

Outcome

On hold for 7 days — Plenty of things to fix, but since this is a very short article, I'll give you a chance. Good luck with editing; Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:44, 12 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Made various fixes, okay to pass this? --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:09, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Passing Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:47, 13 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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