Talk:Batuka (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Should do this article today or tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Target Batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
Remove the formats
Remove target on Madonna Ciccone per WP:OVERLINK
Link to the music video in the infobox
"It was written by Madonna" → "The song was written by Madonna
"and produced by Madonna and Mirwais" → "while produced by Madonna and the latter of the three"
""Batuka" features the" → "It features the"
"group who play drums" → "group that play drums" with the appropriate wikilink removal since it is obvious
"and lyrically it deals about" → "and the lyrics of the song are about"
"received positive reviews" → "received generally positive reviews"
Only one reviewer called it "hypnotic"; try and replace this with something else, though I may have further comment(s) about that once you have
"An accompanying music video for the song was" → "An accompanying music video was"
"and tried to recreate the" → "which was an attempt to recreate the"
"met the group and" → "met the Batukadeiras Orchestra, as well as"
""Batuka" was included on" → "The song was included on"
"with the Batukadeiras Orchestra in a semi-circle playing drums" → "with the group performing in a semi-circle, playing drums,"

Background and recording

On the text box, add a dash before Madonna's name to present the quote better
"In these sessions, they" → "In the sessions, they"
"its members ranked from teenage girls" → "the members ranged from teenage girls"
"Madonna described their first encounter as an" → "Madonna described her first encounter with them as an"
"experience. The music was" → "experience". She continued, stating that the "music was"
Remove target on Madame X
"which she encouraged them to just repeat" → "that she encouraged the Batukadeiras Orchestra to "just repeat""
Remove wikilink on translator
"according to the singer, they" → "according to Madonna, the group"
"that they all pray together" → "on everyone in the studio all praying together"
"they blessed Madonna" → "the Batukadeiras Orchestra blessed Madonna"
"commented about the moment," → "commented on the moment,"
"encounter it was"." → "encounter it was."" since that is a full sentence quotation
Target feminist to Feminism
"because she felt it sounded" → "due to her feeling it sounded"
"called it "Batuka" because" → "retitled the song to "Batuka" because,"
"played by women"." → "played by women.""

Composition

Retitle to Composition and lyrics
"Madonna, Mirwais Ahmadzaï and David Banda" → "Madonna, Mirwais and Banda" with the appropriate target
"production was in charge of the singer and Ahmadzaï" → "production was handled by the singer and Mirwais"
"David was the only one" → "Banda was the only one"
Target batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
[6][7] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
"It features drums played" → "The song features drums played" with the removed wikilink
[8][9] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [1]
"with the orchestra singing their own solos in Cape Verdean Creole language" → "with the group singing their own solos in the Cape Verdean Creole language"
"Its lyrics deal about" → "The lyrics deal with"
[8] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [10][11]
"The line "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can’t stop us" was" → "The lyrics "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can't stop us" were"
"reference to the current" → "reference to current"
[12][15] should both be solely at the end of the sentence

Critical reception

"According to Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly, the song" → "Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly stated the song"
[17] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [18]
"Opinion that was shared" → "C.M.'s opinion was shared"
"Nick Smith, it" → "Nick Smith, the song"
[20] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [21]
"According to Xavi Sancho from El País, the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "Xavi Sancho from El País wrote that the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
"that "Batuka" successfully" → "that the song successfully"
"as well as calling it" → "while calling it"
"opined it" → "opined that the song"
"that accompanied by the" → "that her accompanied by the"
"Kristi Kates from Northern Express newspaper" → "Kristi Kates of the Northern Express newspaper"
"was also positive," → "was similarly positive,"
"noted that "Batuka" was one" → "noted that the song was one"
"Wren Graves of" → "In a mixed review, Wren Graves of"
"to the song, but called it" → "to "Batuka", though called the song"
"came from Daniel Megarry from" → "was provided by Daniel Megarry from"
"who classified it" → "who ranked it"
"Zilch"." → "Zilch.""

Music video

"Filming for the music video for "Batuka"" → "Filming of the music video for "Batuka"" with the wikilink
"in April 2019, in" → "during April 2019 in"
"Julião, in" → "Julião of"
"who also directed the music video" → "who was also director of the video"
Add year in brackets for "Dark Ballet"
[32] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [16]
Remove wikilink on Refinery29
"how she met the group" → "how she met the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
"looked like a typical house" → "looked like a typical one"
"as their first meeting place," → "for their first meeting place,"
"She elaborated that she hoped it" → "Madonna elaborated, stating that she hoped it"
"and how "expressive" she" → "as well as how "expressive" she"
"and how she wanted to capture it in their" → "and having wanted to capture it in the"
Img needs alt text
"The video begins with the following message:" → "The music video begins with a message that reads,"
"upon the women of the orchestre," → "on the women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra,"
"as they sing, beat out" → "while they sing, beat out"
"looking out to the" → "from which the group look out to the"
"Madonna dances freestyle," → "Madonna performs a freestyle dance,"
"and joined them"." → "and joined them.""
"Upon its release, it received" → "The music video was met with"
"Little Black Book website called the video" → "Little Black Book website staff called it"
"and deemed it as a" → "while they deemed it as a"
"Justin Ravitz from Refinery29 called the video" → "Ravitz branded the visual"
[16] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [35][36]
"labeled it as" → "staff both labeled it as"
"noted how it references" → "noted how the video references"
"Portuguese newspaper Público opined that" → "The staff of Público opined that"
"According to Mike Nied from Idolator, "I'd say that she has" → "Mike Nied from Idolator said that "she has"
"felt from the group" → "felt from the Batukadeiras Orchestra"

Live performance

"fourteen of the twenty two women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "14 of the 22 women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra while performing"
"It began with the Orchestra gathering around" → "The performance began with the group gathering around"
"was sitting to the side" → "sat to the side"
"and doing some" → "and they did some"

I rewrote it as "and she did some" because Madonna was the one dancing, as ref 38 says Alex ^{reach me!} 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Think you could add the date of the performance somewhere?

The performance was part of a tour which happened between 2019 and 2020, as stated in the article Alex ^{reach me!} 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

[41] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [42]
"while according to Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic it was" → "while Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic said it was"

Credits and personnel

Wikilink Madonna to herself
Target vocals to Singing
Credits and personnel adapted from the Madame X album liner notes.[4] → Credits and personnel adapted from the liner notes of Madame X.[4]

References

Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Copyvio score is too high at 54.8%; fix quoting from ref 1 to decrease this
Remove or replace ref 5 per WP:RSP
Remove wikilink on Us Weekly for ref 17
MusicOMH → musicOMH on ref 20
Cite Ericeira Mag in the website/work layout instead for ref 30

External links

Remove video from here

Are you ok with the audio link? Alex ^{reach me!} 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Yeah, that's fine --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Final comments and verdict

On hold after a nice review of this one! --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:24, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake

Done; take a look above Alex ^{reach me!} 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

✓ Pass after the successful fixes! --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]