Talk:Battle of the Saw/GA1

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 13:59, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I had this page on my watchlist for some unclear reason, so I'll pick up the GAN. Hog Farm _Bacon 13:59, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Images

Can you add a note into the map caption indicating which numbered mark represents the Saw? It's not clear, as its not at one of the named cities. Presuming that its #7.

Good point. Sloppy of me. Added.

Background

Like with the Siege of Tunis article, can you add a brief mention of the name Mercenary War when the revolt transitions to open conflict

Done.

Campaign

"The Carthaginians were probably organised in three divisions: one under Hamilcar, one under his senior subordinate general Hannibal, and the third a strong cavalry force commanded by Naravus" - I'm assuming Naravus is a typo for Naravas.

Gah! Thank goodness one of us is literate. Fixed.

Infobox

I feel like "light" would be better than "unknown" for Carthaginian casualties in the infobox.

True. Changed.

Not much to talk about here. Very well written article, and since the majority of it is the same as the material from the Siege of Tunis article I just reviewed, I've already caught most of the errors in the prose. Placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 14:41, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Hog Farm, that was very swift of you. All done. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:01, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Passing this one. My goal is to try to get to 250 GA reviews by the end of the year; I'm at 236 right now, so that ought to be doable. Hog Farm _Bacon 17:49, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hog Farm, I shall try to generate some more GANs, to help you out.

That is exceptionally impressive! Gog the Mild (talk) 18:22, 28 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]