Talk:Battle of the Eureka Stockade/GA1
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 07:44, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
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1. Well-written: | ||
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). |
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2c. it contains no original research. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. |
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3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. |
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6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | ||
7. Overall assessment. |
A few overall comments:
- the structure is rather odd and seems almost like a fork of other articles on the same or closely related subjects, repeating much of the material from those articles. The Background section covers too much detail about the lead-up to the battle, this is far better off summarised here and covered in detail in the Eureka Rebellion article (which is pretty detailed). The Background section also covers the battle itself, which is also very odd, given that would be for the main Battle section, not the Background.
- I have a similar observation about the Fortification of the Eureka lead section. This should just be a simple summary of the Eureka Stockade (fortification) article.
- In summary, I suggest the article be edited extensively to:
- make the Background section more brief, covering only key points from the Eureka Rebellion article, and remove all reference to the actual battle
- introduce the decision to resist with force and build the stockade, an "Establishment of the stockade" section, summarising the Eureka Stockade (fortification) article as part of this, including the defensive advantages and disadvantages of the site and construction chosen
- cover any comings and goings to and from the stockade and its vicinity prior to the commencement of the battle in terms of defenders and besiegers, ending with a basic explanation of the opposing forces at the time the battle began. A possible section heading might be "Opposing forces"
- cover the actual battle in as much detail as possible in a "Battle" section
- cover the immediate aftermath of the battle in an "Aftermath" section, with a brief para at the end covering the longer-term consequences, which of course should be in the overarching Eureka Rebellion article
- once that is done, rewrite the lead to summarise the rewritten and restructured article
I will go through and make observations/suggestions against the criteria in the table of course, but in its current form, this article is not GA quality, as it clearly does not meet criterion 3. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:11, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
- There is a lot to go through with the images. If you have questions, ping me here and I'll help you work through them in detail. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:43, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
- I'm probably going to fail this shortly, as I haven't seen any improvement action since I completed the initial check. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:45, 18 September 2023 (UTC)
- There is a lot to do. I would normally only put a review on hold for a week or so, and it has been a month with no editing. I've failed it and encourage you to rewrite it as suggested and fix the image licensing then renominate it. Well done so far. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:48, 21 September 2023 (UTC)
- I'm probably going to fail this shortly, as I haven't seen any improvement action since I completed the initial check. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:45, 18 September 2023 (UTC)