Talk:Battle of Sarantaporo/GA1

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 14:32, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this. Give me a couple of days. To be going on with, re images:

The map: "Source" means where did the information on the map come from, which was probably a book.
- I did not create this map but there is a nearly identical map on a book I own so I added it as a source on Commons.--Catlemur (talk) 19:32, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Good stuff. Thanks.

The lithograph: Needs a US PD tag. And "Source" in this case means where did you find the image which you self scanned? Again possibly a book.
- Don't know where its from so I am removing it.--Catlemur (talk) 19:32, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The medal: I assume that you mean that you have an image of the medal, rather than the actual medal? If so, then see immediately above.
- Removed it for good measure.--Catlemur (talk) 20:42, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:32, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I have done a little copy editing which you will want to check. If you are unhappy with any of it, please flag it up here.

You start your list of divisions with "the 1st Infantry Division". Each of the other divisions needs 'the' in front of it.

Done

"and the reserve (redif) Nasliç and Aydın Reserve Divisions" This seems a bit inconsistent. Are you sure that the Aydın Division had "Reserve" in its name? And that the Nasliç Division didn't?

Removed the extraneous Reserve.--Catlemur (talk) 20:42, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"locating the headquarters of the VIII Provisional Corps at Hania Viglas and those of a reserve division at Glikovo" Are these Ottoman or Greek units? If Ottoman, could you say so?

Those are Ottoman units whose positions were located by Greek patrols, I added Ottoman in front of the VIII Provisional Corps again.--Catlemur (talk) 20:42, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Having ceded Thessaly to Greece in the aftermath of the Convention of Constantinople" I thought that Thessaly was ceded by the Convention, and in the aftermath of the Russo-Turkish War of 1877–1878?

Replaced with "Having ceded Thessaly to Greece in the Convention of Constantinople (1881)".--Catlemur (talk) 20:42, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Gog the Mild (talk) 20:15, 25 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That all seems good. A little more copy editing from me for you to check that you are happy with.

A sentence or two at the end stating how the war ended would be useful?

I wrote a couple of sentences on how the war's conclusion.--Catlemur (talk) 16:42, 27 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I have tweaked the language a little. Could you check that you are happy with my changes?

Cite 7: a hyphen in the page range.

Done

Katsikostas: the English translation of the title should be in title case.

Done

I shall have another read through, but apart from this it seems good to me. A well put together article. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:09, 26 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Good work. Nice article. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:48, 27 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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