Talk:Battle of Hwanggan/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk) 01:56, 10 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looking forward to another in this series of Korean War articles; should get to it this w/e... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 01:56, 10 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Technical

Chongju is a dab link that needs to be fixed.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 03:36, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
No external link probs.

Lead

I think you need to expand the second (or third) para(s) of the lead to mention the circumstances of the US withdrawal that gave the North Koreans their victory. As written it seems to be concentrating on the positives for the 27th and one almost gets the impression that the first para is wrong and it was actually counted as a US victory.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 03:36, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Battle

In the meantime, the NK 2nd Division, arriving in Taejon too late for the fight there, continued its advance down the Poun-Hwanggan road. -- "In the meantime" isn't a great way to start a brand new section, suggest we drop it. Also, by "too late for the fight there" do you mean too late for the Battle of Yongdong? If so, I'd spell it out (or whatever action if does refer to).
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 03:36, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Aftermath

Again, I'm not sure we've spelt out clearly enough why it's considered an NK victory when the Americans performed so well -- perhaps you can say something like "although the North Koreans achieved a victory through finally taking the ground, the 27th performed well by delaying the NK advance for 5 days..." or something like that. Nothing radical needed, just clarification.
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 03:36, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Generally prose, coverage, referencing, structure, and images all appear fine. If you can just address the above points I'll be happy to pass. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 02:57, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

- Fixed everything. Thanks for another review! —Ed!^(talk) 03:36, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Cool, sorry I took a bit longer to get to it than I indicated... Anyway, passing as GA -- well done! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:20, 22 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]