Talk:Battle of Groton Heights/GA1

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Reviewer: JonCatalán^(Talk) 05:48, 15 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments: Looks good, all around.

"British casualties were also high; General Arnold was criticized by his superiors for the number of casualties incurred." → I changed this to, "British casualties were also high, leading to criticism of General Arnold by part of his superiors."
"Arnold, who believed the fort could be easily taken when he ordered Eyre to seize it, reached a prominence from which he could see its defenses, and realized that it was more complete than anticipated, and that taking it would not be easy." → This came off as overly complicated, so I changed it to the following, "General Arnold ordered Eyre to assault the fort, believing the fort would fall easily. However, upon reaching a prominence from which he could see its defenses, Arnold realized that the fort was more complete than anticipated and that taking it would not be easy."
"On the return of the second flag..." → What does this mean?

Clarified The flag is previously mentioned; I've added "parley" to clarify meaning. Magic♪piano 00:54, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"The damage done to New London was substantial: one estimate placed the value destroyed at nearly $500,000..." → What dollar value is this in?
- Comment Randall doesn't say, but it is presumably contemporary dollars. I've added a sentence including the official state assessment. Magic♪piano 00:54, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I did some other relatively light copyediting, as well.

Your changes look fine to me, I've added things to clarify the other issues. Magic♪piano 00:54, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, looks good then. I will promote shortly. JonCatalán^(Talk) 06:09, 17 October 2010 (UTC)[reply]