Talk:Battle of Emmendingen/GA1

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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 20:37, 5 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Why are the army names italicized in the lead? fixed
One duplicate link, for Freiburg im Breisgau. fixed
The Background section isn't clear - it mentions two sides, presumably the French and Austrians referenced in the lead, but then it mentions the Coalition Army of the Lower Rhine - most readers won't know who the Coalition is - I would probably move the note further up expanded a bit for clarity
"...army at the Amberg, Würzburg..." I think something is missing here. fixed
"The fighting was swift and furious." - this seems out of place where it is. Fighting between what forces? I assume Saint-Cyr and Nauendorf? If so, I'd move it to after "...Austrian shooters ambushed Saint-Cyr's men." fixed, i think
"Wartensleben's men needed all day to fight his way to Emmendingen, and during the shooting, he was fatally wounded." - "his" should be "their" - for clarity, "he" should probably be "Wartensleben". clarified
"...the Austrians did not flank or to puncture the French line." - something is missing here. clarified, I hope
Why the mix of long and short citations? First citation is long, subsequent cites are short.
Images check out. Parsecboy (talk) 20:42, 5 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Parsecboy: thank you....it's always good to have a fresh pair of eyes to say something doesn't make sense. :) auntieruth (talk) 15:42, 7 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]