Talk:Battle of Dibrivka/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Augustios Paleo (talk · contribs) 17:51, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Prose & other

The flag for the Imperial German Army in the box is wrong, the one used here is the naval ensign

Oh whoops. Which flag should I use instead? --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This one AFH (talk) 13:17, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:13, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

This page desperately needs images. A map of the region with troop movements or just the political situation in general could be very useful due to this complicated topic.

I can look into getting some maps made. Although they'd likely be quite crude, as map-making isn't one of my skills. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Expand the prose, include things like: planning, who was involved, why did it happen

I'll see what I can do, but the prose is already pretty comprehensive. Are there any specific places in the article where you think there are holes in the prose? --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Include AFH (talk) 13:21, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"During the conflict, Ukrainian anarchists had sided with the Soviets,[4] but following the Treaty of Brest-Litovsk, in which the Central Powers were invited to invade Ukraine,[5] the anarchists were forced to retreat to Russia, where they regrouped in Taganrog and planned to launch a war of independence against the occupying powers.[6]" Break up this sentence

Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"the newly established Ukrainian State.[7]" include how this state was a puppet or occupation government of the Central Powers, as it would give more context.

As the sources generally describe it as a "German-backed regime", I went with "client state of the German Empire". Let me know if I should change it. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

That sounds good AFH (talk) 13:16, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"They then withdrew north to Pokrovske, where they launched another surprise attack against the Austrians and briefly captured the town from the occupying powers.[9]" The use of they is redundant, maybe say "The anarchists then withdrew north to Pokrovske... and liberated the town from the occupying powers".

Changed first instance of "They" to "The anarchists", but I left the second part of the sentence as saying "captured" rather than "liberated", as the occupation forces later returned to Pokrovske. In my view, "liberation" implies the occupying forces don't return. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Battle

change to Battle and planning, as much of this section covers the plans

Done. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"They selected 30 men to carry out the attack, which was to take place during the day, while the Austrians were resting.[16]" Outline who they is: Shchus and Makhno

Clarified. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

"Others turned and fled in a panic.[17] Fleeing towards Pokrovske, the Austrians were pursued and captured by the local peasantry," use other words besides "flee"

Used "retreat" in second case. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Aftermath

You mention several towns and areas, a map of this situation would really improve this article and is necessary for Good Article. If needed, you can probably request one.

Where could I request one from? --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia:Graphics Lab/Map workshop, here, sorry I meant to post this. If not this then WP: Military History might have something like it. AFH (talk) 13:15, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I've put in a request for a map there. --Grnrchst (talk) 14:43, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Since this is out of your control, I will be promoting. Good job! AFH (talk) 21:09, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Wait, because the German army was not directly involved in the battle it is not necessary to include them. I will fix this for you. AFH (talk) 21:10, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The word "insurgents" is repetitive in the second paragraph, words like "rebels", "anarchists", etc. could be used

Changed a couple of cases. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, well written on an often overlooked war. Happy to see what you write next.

@Augustios Paleo: Thank you very much! I think I've covered most of the things mentioned here, except for the lack of maps and prose holes. Let me know how I can proceed from here and I'll try my best to figure things out. --Grnrchst (talk) 08:41, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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