Talk:Battle of Constantinople (922)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 16:36, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start this one shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:36, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am ready to address any issues. Regards, --Gligan (talk) 10:35, 2 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, I've been a bit distracted of late. I'll try to get to this this weekend.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:20, 2 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That is no problem at all, I myself am very busy and understand your situation :) --Gligan (talk) 11:28, 18 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No DABs, external links good.
Images appropriately licensed.
The second redlink for the peace treaty is redundant to the one in the lede. Same with Saktikios.

Done. --Gligan (talk) 11:28, 18 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I would suggest moving the portal bar below the sources section; I find it distracting to see it above all the appendixes. Your choice, though.

Done, although I think it makes more sense the portal bar to be in the section "See also". --Gligan (talk) 11:28, 18 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Not seeing much else that needs corrections on this first read. I'll give it another pass tomorrow or the day after to see if anything jumps out at me.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:23, 12 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

outskirts of capital add "the" between "of" and "capital".
A year earlier the Bulgarians engaged and defeated a Byzantine army in the Battle of Pegae in the vicinity of Constantinople. Delete this, it's not connected to the rest of the paragraph.
In the summer of 922 the Byzantine emperor delete "of 922" and capitalize Emperor.
The attempts in 922 to negotiate a Bulgarian–Arab alliance for a joint assault of Constantinople were discovered by the Byzantines and successfully countered. Delete the year from the sentence. Or rephrase the beginning "The subsequent attempts to negotiate..."
horse of Saktikios stalled in the mud of a river Cars stall, not horses. I'm sure that the horse got stuck or simply froze. And what river?
were empty words because at that time the Byzantine Empire Simplify and delete "at that time"--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:18, 18 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Regarding the river: I don't know what river that might be (not sure if there are any rivers of significance around Istanbul). It is possible that it was actually a stream. However, in the chronicles it is mentioned as "a river" and that is why I wrote it that way. Regards, --Gligan (talk) 11:22, 19 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Iazyges

Personally I feel that while this article has much potential, it has many red links, so overall I am against the conferment of GA status upon this article. Iazyges (talk) 23:23, 11 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Redlinks are not the responsibility of the nominating editor. You might consider expanding them yourself.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:13, 12 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Gligan, I'm pinging you to let you know that the review has begun. Display name 99 (talk) 20:25, 16 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, Display name 99. @Iazyges: The red links are an incentive to write articles on the missing topics. Constantine, who I consider the highest authority in Wikipedia on Byzantine topics might one day write an article about Saktikios, while sooner or later I will write an article about the Byzantine-Bulgarian treaty of 927. --Gligan (talk) 11:28, 18 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]