Talk:Battle of Chongju (1950)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk) 04:40, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Staking my claim on what I'm sure will be another interesting account of Australian forces in action during the Cold War... Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 04:40, 15 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Finally got round to the detailed review...

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Aside from my usual copyedit, a few points...

Infobox -- Not sure of standard and not too fussed as long as you're consistent, but we have in Belligerents "United Nations" bolded with a colon, followed by a bulleted list, and then we have in Units Involved "27th Brit Com Bde" unbolded without a colon, followed by a bulleted list. Should be consistent and, personally, I think the latter (unbolded without a colon) works fine.

Yes that makes sense. Done. Anotherclown (talk) 08:43, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Clearance of the town

The following morning the Australians remained in position, finding more than 150 North Korean dead within their defensive positions at daybreak. -- within whose defensive positions, the Australians' or the North Koreans'?

Done. Anotherclown (talk) 08:43, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Meanwhile, aerial reconnaissance subsequently reported the presence of North Korean tanks to the west of Chongju. -- "meanwhile" inplies more-or-less simultaneously, while "subsequently" suggests afterwards; can't both be right so choose which is more appropriate and lose the other... ;-)

Done. Anotherclown (talk) 08:43, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Appears inconsistent representation of numbers, for instance you have "10" and "12" early on, but then "thirty-six" later -- I assume you're trying to stick to the rule of spelling out single-digit numbers and using figures for anything bigger, so perhaps best check throughout to ensure consistency.

Done. Anotherclown (talk) 08:43, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Do we know who fired the shells that wounded Green? As written it could be taken as enemy or friendly fire so if we know let's spell it out.

Done. Anotherclown (talk) 08:43, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Cool; I put "around dusk" back to the beginning of the sentence because at the end it sounded like a location, not a time... ;-) Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:07, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Images -- all appear appropriately licensed.

Summary -- looks very good, mate, if you can just address the points above I'll be happy to pass. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:11, 3 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again for your time and comments. Anotherclown (talk) 08:43, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Tks mate, passing as GA. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 09:07, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]