Talk:Battle of Atlanta/GA1

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Reviewer: WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 21:26, 30 January 2011 (UTC) I will comment later. Have a good review! WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 21:26, 30 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comment(s)
- Lede is too short. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 06:01, 2 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Thanks for your multiple notices, although I tried to add a bit to the lede within 15 hours of your comment. Personally, I think the lede meets the requirements at Wikipedia:Lead#Length; the article is just under 8000 characters long, and thus requires only one to two paragraphs. There are also plenty of similarly-sized GAs (e.g., Battle of Arcadiopolis (970)) with shorter ledes. Guoguo12 --Talk-- 01:15, 4 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- File:Potter house atlanta.jpg requires a license/copyright tag. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 18:56, 5 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done. To be precise, I replaced the image with a similar one that is licensed. Guoguo12 --Talk-- 19:31, 5 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Heavy reliance on [1], can you supplement with a book? It won't stop the article from passing, but webpages can get hacked, printed books, no. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 00:18, 6 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - I'll see what I can do, but I use that website in particular and not something like this is because the former is published and run by the United States National Park Service, which should (supposedly) be less susceptible to hacking. Guoguo12 --Talk-- 14:45, 6 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- To commemorate the 140th anniversary of the battle in 2004, two new markers were erected in the Inman Park neighborhood. Describe the markers in the article. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 00:20, 6 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - I couldn't find any more information, but I did add more information about markers in general. Guoguo12 --Talk-- 14:45, 6 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Up to this point, every issue raised has been answered except the one concerning web source usage. Therefore, I give you more comments and issues.
- I'm assuming that the (CS)s are referring to Confederate divisions, correct? If so, clarify in the article. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 01:25, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - I have clarified the meaning. Since I copied (legitimately) the inscription text directly from the source, I didn't change the "(CS)". I've replaced it with "[CSA flag]" (as seen on the actual marker). Guoguo12 --Talk-- 03:18, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - Better, but not exactly what I would like... Moving on for now. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 17:03, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Two cite 14s in 1st para of section Siege and closure. Only one is needed. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 17:07, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fixed. Guoguo12 --Talk-- 20:08, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- McPherson rode S. from the Ga. R.R. when he heard firing in Sugar Cr. valley... Ga R.R.? Clarify in the article. WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 17:11, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - I may be able to clarify it, but I'm more or less in favor of minimal change. If that's not okay, I'll see what I can do, or I may replace the quote entirely, since it doesn't add too much value to the article. Your call. Guoguo12 --Talk-- 20:08, 7 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
    - I feel the entire marker text should be replaced with inline text with citations to the markers, since there are so many grammatical errors and misunderstandings. BTW, what is Ga. R.R.? WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 07:43, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      - Most likely "Georgia railroad", but there were many railroads used by the Confederates as supply lines to Atlanta, a major Southern rail hub. Destroying/capturing these supply lines was the idea behind the remainder of the Atlanta Campaign battles. Anyway, I didn't think there was much to write about when it came to historical markers (I mean, what do I say? That they marked historical places?), so I added a quote by Commander Sherman on McPherson's death. What do you think? Guoguo12 --Talk-- 20:26, 9 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
        Great. Beyond that, I will pass your article. Great work! WikiCopter (♠ • ♣ • ♥ • ♦ • simple • commons • lost • cvu • onau) 03:37, 11 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
        Awesome! Thank you so much for reviewing! Wow! My first GA! Guoguo12 --Talk-- 19:50, 11 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]