Talk:Batik Day

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Hi Halimnat! I read through your article and I really enjoyed it! I liked how you focused on the many different pieces of batik day like the tradition and the current day practices. I also am impressed that you included a picture, maybe you could add another showing the process? I feel like thats one of those things that is hard to explain with words and a visual could help. I also think that there could be more references throughout the article to back up the statements. You've done a great job!

Rickijonna (talk) 06:56, 31 October 2015 (UTC)Rickijonna[reply]

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@Halimnat: Greetings! Your article is off to a great start. I had some suggestions for how to improve it:

Watch issues of tone and strive to keep a neutral point of view. For example talking about the "beautiful fabric" doesn't sound like an encyclopedia and should be avoided, I think. Even though I agree it is beautiful! Saying "there is reason to celebrate" seems non-neutral as well.
The whole second paragraph seems to be about a meeting. I don't completely understand where this came from and I don't completely understand why this is appropriate for an article on the day. This should either be made clear and reworked or just removed.
You have a bunch of citations in your bibliography. I think you should work these all as references using the <ref></ref> tags. You seem to have figured it out with the two references you already do include but you can check out Help:Referencing for beginners for more detail on how to do this.
You might want to find more coverage in newspapers or other reliable sources to help establish notability.

Once you've done this, this should be ready to go. Go ahead and work on this a bit and then move it into Wikipedia! Good luck! —mako ๛ 23:45, 23 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]