Talk:Bassline (Chris Brown song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Till (talk · contribs) 02:49, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will be reviewing the article. It's been a long wait (a month actually). Till 02:49, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. — Oz (talk) 04:34, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

Try to incorporate the whole lead into one paragraph.
The production of the song was handled by → Just say the producer, let's not beat around the bush.
The song contains lyrics about Brown trying to "convince a hot girl he spots in the club to come back to his crib" → This would be better paraphrased.
"Bassline" garnered mixed reviews from music critics, with some critics noting it as one of the standout tracks on the album, while others criticized the song's production and lyrics. → This jumps from past tense to present tense and back to past tense. Try to keep everything consistent.
To the works by → Works... you mean songs? If so, then just write songs.
"Bassline" debuted at number 28 on the UK R&B Chart and at number 122 on the UK Singles Chart → "Bassline" debuted at numbers 28 and 122 on the UK R&B Chart and UK Singles Chart, respectively.
There is barely background information in the first section, so change the title to "Development and composition".
The production of the song was handled by → Same as point 2
with assistance by Iain Findley → With assistance from Iain Findley
The song last for a duration of three minutes and 58 seconds
to the works by → Same as above
Why is penis in quotation marks? Lol.
Make the chart table sortable.
Ref #15: publisher is Hearst Magazines UK.
A picture would be nice.

Done but what do you mean in point 10? — Oz (talk) 04:34, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

..."The song last" ... "for a duration"... Till 05:05, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Um I still don't get you lol. Do you want me to change or remove a word? — Oz (talk) 05:14, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The song last" is incorrect grammar, it should be "the song lasts..." and "for a duration" is completely redundant and should be removed. Till 05:24, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done — Oz (talk) 05:30, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Btw "which incorporates elements of reggae" should be "that incorporates elements of reggae". Till 05:09, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Done — Oz (talk) 05:14, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Passing. Till 05:32, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. — Oz (talk) 05:37, 14 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]