Talk:Barry Burton/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Boneless Pizza! (talk · contribs) 12:52, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 22:01, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Will take this on in the coming days. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:01, 10 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Six GA Criteria

1. Article is mostly well-written. Reception flounders in prose.

2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.

3. Coverage seems sparse and smushed together.

4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.

5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.

6. Article uses one fair use image with proper rationale, and uses one sound file with proper rationale.

Lead

-Looks good

Concept and design

-"Then they "made him look tough outside, and motion is "old man" to make balance." Not quite sure what this means

Appearances

-" her soul into Natalie, and leading to the game's main conflict." Again, confused on meaning here. Reword this if possible.

Reception

-"He claimed to have taken on the role of Jill in his first Resident Evil game; a decision that gave his encounter a majestic aspect that he would not have otherwise had." Thompson or Burton? How does he take on Jill's role? None of this is defined earlier in the article.

-"The majesty manifested in Barry Burton's "flowing red beard, flawed logic, compulsive confusion, tactical prowess, and eloquence encapsulated." No other character in the series, according to Zac, arouses as much anticipation with just their appearance. Zac also referred him to be the Adam West of the Resident Evil universe, and claimed that "his memory still burns in the minds of his many fans" Feel this can just be trimmed to something like "He described how Burton's character was highly memorable with fans, with re-appearances of the character sparking high anticipation among fans of the series."

-"In the end, Wilson referred to him" In the end of what? You don't describe enough of the article for this to be a feasible description.

-"According to Melissa Sarnowski of Screen Rant, Barry Burton's debut in the first Resident Evil made him the best non-player character." So because he debuted in a game he was a popular character? I'm not quite seeing the cause and effect here.

-"Multiple sources have also noted that line." Noted that line for what?

-The article's Reception feels very incoherent as of right now. It feels like random quotes smushed together from various trivial mentions and minor sources. The stuff on his dialogue is interesting, but the whole thing feels it could be easily summarizeable elsewhere. I'll take a further source analysis later today, but I'm not exactly convinced on the separate notability of this subject from the overall characters list as of right now.

Overall

There's some big problems that need to be addressed with phrasing, primarily in Reception. I will provide some more information later in terms of sourcing, but for the time being I'll place this on hold to allow for time to work on the article. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 13:19, 13 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 Many thanks for the review, but unfortunately I feel like I'm too tired at the FAC. So because of that, I will say that I am giving up with this and other RE articles. I am also 50/50 to the notability. Feel free to send it to Afd if you wished. Thanks. 🍕Boneless Pizza!🍕 (🔔) 13:36, 13 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Boneless Pizza! looking at the sources deeper, I feel the subject meets notability, even if it is a bit slim. I feel you could potentially expand this out with the Bloody Disgusting source a bit, though I admittedly am not sure of where I'd start with that. In any case, if you're certain about not wanting to work on this article for the time being, I can quick fail this nomination, and you can re-nominate this once you feel you're less burnt out. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 01:48, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Feel free to fail it. Again, thank you and apologize for wasting your time here. 🍕Boneless Pizza!🍕 (🔔) 02:24, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Boneless Pizza! Alright. Feel free to re-nominate once you feel you're ready, and best of luck at your current FAC nomination. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 02:36, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I doubt I will renominate it, since I started removing most of the RE character articles on my watchlist (lost interest). Also, thank you! 🍕Boneless Pizza!🍕 (🔔) 02:38, 14 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]