Talk:Barbara Neely/GA1

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Reviewer: Puffin (talk · contribs) 09:56, 4 December 2011 (UTC)

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	First of all, you do not nominate an article for GA while a maintenance tag is still up. You do need additional sources for verification. In the infobox, murder mystery needs a capital letter for murder. The grammar could be improved, I suggest asking for a copy edit at WP:GOCE.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	The lead needs to be extended, it does not really summarise the article. ", a middle-aged mother" How old is "middle aged?" Please clarify! ""Blanche allows Neely to explore the female beauty" Please clarify, or provide a citation. This is likely to be challenged. "popularly known as Pennsylvania Dutch" This is a peacock term" Popularly is a peacock term, please re word this. "producing various shows" Avoid the word various, it is too vague. Please clarify this.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Inline citations belong directly after the punctuation, where you left a space. Use {{cite web}} for web references, not just bare ref tags. Web references need the author, publisher, publishing date and access date Be consistent on if you put retrieved in capitals. (You should put the "R" in capital" e.g: Retrieved not retreived) Use {{cite book}} for book references.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Ref 1 - Needs publishing date Ref 3 - Needs publishing date and page number(s). Ref 4 - Has a cite error, please sort it out. Ref 6 7 8 and 9 - Needs page numbers Ref 11 and 12 - Need access date. Ref 13 - Needa author, publisher and publishing date. You need to name your references. "Barbara Neely enjoyed a wide range of authors such as P.D. James Chester Himes, and Walter Mosley but the one author that inspired her the most was Toni Morrison. She used her as a model of what she wanted to become. She saw what Morrison did with the experiences of black woman to tell stories of ordinary people and tried to mimic the same style" Unsourced, please provide a citation.
	2c. it contains no original research.	Maybe, some things are unsourced and need citations.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Possibly, but what month was she born? Can you get information like this to improve the accuracy of the article?
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	It would help to include an image, but it doesn't matter if you can't.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	This article is not currently ready for good article status, so I will not be listing it at this time. Please consider the points raised above and after working on it, take it to WP:Peer review and then please renominate at WP:GAN. I'm afraid this article is quite a long way off of GA status, you need to fix these issues.