Talk:Banksia paludosa/GA1

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Reviewer: Ucucha 14:55, 11 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will add comments hopefully in a few days. Ucucha 14:55, 11 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~The Brown Antechinus has been split, and the populations south of Kioloa, New South Wales are now Antechinus agilis. See [1] and [2] for the ranges of the two species.~~

Aha, Kioloa is well south of Barren Grounds, so it remains Brown Antechinus. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:24, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~"Obovate" is defined on second, but not first occurrence.~~

done Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:24, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

First paragraph of "Description" is rather long.

just thinking about where to split nicely subject- and appearance-wise.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps separate paragraphs about the flowers and about the seedlings? Ucucha 15:12, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~Define "lignotuber" on first occurrence (it's defined in "Ecology", but is mentioned several times before that).~~

done Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:56, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~Anything else on differences (or lack thereof) from other species?~~

~~adding and reffing to come~~ added and reffed Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~The map makes it look like it occurs far south of Ulladulla, to the Victoria border.~~

Yes, it has a disjunct distribution, and the second population of subsp. paludosa is right on the victorian border. astrolux is almost contiguous (30 km apart) from larger northern area. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~The map would be clearer if it did not show all of Australia, so the actual distribution could be shown in more detail.~~

~~yeah, I'll fetch a map of NSW I think and go with that tonight sometime.~~ done Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

~~First sentence of "Cultivation" is rather confused. Villa San Donato is not in England, and what is the nurseryman in Bristol doing there?~~

Ucucha 18:47, 11 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

har har, rejigged Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:58, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"private gardens in Clapham Common, Hackney by a nurseryman in Bristol" - some pretty strange geography there - could there be some connection with Clapton Nursery in Hackney maybe? Melburnian (talk) 05:24, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nope - some other notable gardeners though....Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:48, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, that all makes sense to me now with the clarifications.Melburnian (talk) 15:26, 12 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'm passing the article now, but do consider the last remaining comment. Ucucha 02:12, 14 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I rejigged it a little following your comment - I guess the question is whether to put a qualifier in front of the sentence about Italy like "Elsewhere in Europe," or "Outside of England," to distance it from the first comment about England. Or is it self-explanatory. Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:01, 29 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]