Talk:Band Geeks/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 23:31, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

I will review this article. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 23:31, 31 August 2013 (UTC)

Thank you very much Taylor Trescott for taking time to review this article! :) Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

• The lead is fine.
  • Thanks! :)
• "This includes Patrick and Sandy get in a fight": "get" should be "getting."
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "as a result he gets a trombone stuck up him." I think the wording here could be better, as it doesn't specify who or why he was stuck up the trombone. Try this: "as a result, Sandy sticks him up a trombone."
  •  Done Thanks! Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "Squidward says if everyone plays loud they will be good but instead they play so bad. Squidward changes the idea of loud to quiet." The period after "they play so bad" should be a comma. Also, "they play so bad" is a bit too colloquial. Try "poorly."
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "At this time, a grieving Squidward expresses his disappointment in all of them and goes home to grieve over his failure." Could you find a different word for the second "grieve?"
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "Fortunately, Nickelodeon have a library of royalty-free music." This sentence should be a little more formal, like: "The writers were able to find music easily, as Nickelodeon has a library of royalty-free music."
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "The writers sat there listening to various marching tune." should be reworded a bit. Something like "The writers listened to various marching band tunes."
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "The Bubble Bowl real life crowd" "Real life" should be "live action" and it should be placed before "Bubble Bowl." So: "The live action Bubble Bowl crowd, etc."
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "played the sound effects to series creator" "To" should be "for."
  •  Done thanks! Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• The sentence "The album featured 25 tracks, including the "SpongeBob SquarePants Theme Song"." does not seem necessary. This article is about an episode, not the album. The album itself has an article, so the sentence should be dropped, as readers can go there to learn about the album.
  • Yes, people can follow the wikilink, but they shouldn't have to, to find out it's an album consisting such. The purpose of this is just to have brief info about the album.
• ""Band Geeks" was one of the top episodes as chosen by its viewers at Nick.com" The "its" can be dropped.
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)
• "Over 160,000 votes casted, "Band Geeks" emerged as the winner." Add a "with" to the start of this sentence.
  •  Done Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Final comments

I am placing the article on hold for 7 days so you can address these issues. A final review will come after the issues have been addressed. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 02:20, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

I think everything has been covered and addressed. Also, thank you for taking time to review this article! I hope it is good enough now. Thanks again and have a nice day! :) Mediran (t • c) 04:16, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Great work. I have promoted the article. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 16:59, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Thank you very much for the pass! :) Mediran (t • c) 11:23, 2 September 2013 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.