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Reviewer: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 08:11, 3 January 2023 (UTC)
I habitually take about a week or so to get to GA reviews. If I let it get longer than that, ping me. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 08:11, 3 January 2023 (UTC)
- Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:39, 3 January 2023 (UTC)
- "in its detail an account of character" - not sure this is super clear.
- Edited.
- I tweaked it to "expression" rather than account, hope that's ok.
- Bit of sandwiching with Tolkien's painting and the drawing of the Bag End front hall, which looks especially awkward with the block quote between them.
- Fixed.
- I'm not sure the detail about the note from Thorin is super germane to the topic of Bag End
- Removed.
- You've got section hatnotes for Architecture in Middle-earth twice in the article, just one in an article of this length is enough I think
- Fixed.
something that he calls "a silly phrase... a piece of "French-oriented snobbery"
I think you're missing a set of end quotation marks
- Fixed.
- For the outside/unfamiliar reader, it's not clear where the Lobelia-Vita connection comes from, so the section perhaps doesn't have the impact it should. Can we maybe have a bit of context for why Tolkien would have been poking fun at Vita? Did he know her?
- Added a bit more about the Lobelia-Vita connection. One could go on for pages on this topic, and photos would be nice, but we're in some danger of WP:COATRACK. Hope this is now enough to be clear, it's a juicy topic.
- Hah! Tolkien's satire of Vita Sackville-West as a possible next project?
Honegger points up
- "points out" maybe? Not sure I've ever heard "points up" used this way
- Done.
Pretty minimal griping. I'm open to discussion on any points from above that you disagree with. Sources good, no POV or CV, in-universe stuff is described with appropriate encyclopedic distance. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 09:13, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
- Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:17, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
- Looks good! Easy pass :) ♠PMC♠ (talk) 10:29, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.