Talk:Baby Blue (Action Bronson song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:18, 24 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

You don't need to link "rapper"
It was released on March 3, 2015 → by which label?
fourth and final single off his → fourth and final single from his
second album Mr. Wonderful (2015). It features a → second album Mr. Wonderful (2015), featuring a (to avoid repeating yourself with "it")
(who co-wrote the chorus) → replace the brackets with commas
is the closer to a three-part suite alongside → ??
that's preluded → that is preluded
many whom gave praise to → who generally praised
The accompanying music video → An accompanying music video

Infobox

The ALT is way too heavy. Resume it to just the key points
The release date, lable and genre are not cited in the article's body (!)
For "Producer(s)", only say Mark Ronson's last name

Background and development

Add the respective release years i brackets for "Easy Rider" and "Actin' Crazy" after each song
It acts as the closer to a three-part suite → what do you mean by "the closer"?
"Thug Love Story 2017 The Musical", about an elderly man singing to Bronson about a former love that left the streets → this sentence is way too long. And is "about..." referring to "Baby Blue" or any of the other fellow songs you've talked about?
was used as a reference by Ronson → Maybe I'm a bit dumb, but how can you use a beat as a reference?
with Bronson providing → comma before "with"
the featured artist in the song → credited as a featured artist on the recording
had previous encounters with while lending → had previously encountered, while lending

Citical reception

garnered a positive reception → garnered positive reviews
as the song stealer → as the highlight

Music video

for the song is in the works → for the song was being worked on
Murphy played throughout → replace "played" with "portrayed"

Live performances

Avoid the heavy repetition of "performed" with wordings like "sang", "made an appearance"...

Charts and certifications

fixed by myself

Other stuff

Copy-violation

18.0% is okay!

References

Many things mentioned in the lead and infobox are not cited, such as the genre, release date, label...
Avoid shouting

Outcome

I usually pass the majority of GANs I review, but I do feel like this one needs some more work. You can renominate the article again after some time, and I'll be happy to review it again! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:11, 31 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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