Talk:B'Day Anthology Video Album/GA1

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Reviewer: CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 20:40, 31 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

exlusively -> typo
exlusively at -> through
Knowles shot nine videos for the album, with four other videos having already been filmed. -> a bit repetitive
has been awarded -> its not really an award, its a certification of authenticity for said amount of shipments
denoting?
Outside of North America, -> seems a bit biased and too focused on the US, perhaps "internationally"

That gives the impression that it was worldwide ie everywhere including North America Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lol, maybe "the album was featured as a bonus disc" :P--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 00:02, 6 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The "Still in Love (Kissing You)" video featured a cover of a song by Des'ree and, due to a lawsuit, only initial pressings of the album contain its video. -> a bit lost here

Knowles said that she filmed B'Day Anthology Video Album -> she didn't film it, she compiled it. They were already filmed for other purposes

Only four videos were already filmed, the other nine were filmed especially for the album

do not have to log on to YouTube to watch her music videos, but instead can play them via DVD -> would not. Also, could be worded better
This section could benefit from a basic c/e. The sentencing is a bit choppy
According to Vibe, the shooting of the thirteen videos included on the album means that Knowles holds the record of the most music videos released in a twelve-month period. -> bad sentence

Released, released. -> try to avoid repetitive wording in the same sentence
Again
The video album featured as the second disc on international copies of B'Day Deluxe Edition albeit without the behind-the-scenes,[9] while Irremplazable was the bonus disc in the United States. -> multiple issues. Aside from the poor wording, this is the first time I have read here about Irremplazable. It needs some form of introduction
Prior to its release, copies of the videos were ripped from an advance album and leaked onto the internet in MP4 form.[11] promoted the album by appearing on television shows -> fix
Any sources for the appearances?

At the end of the sentence

Oops, I thought that figure was surprisingly high. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Usually we don't have it like that. If I link the MC version of "I'll Be There", I won't have it come up with the asterisk.--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 00:05, 6 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

No, I could only find three relevant Billboard issues on Google Books, but I'll ask Legolas to do a search. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]