Talk:Azimzhan Askarov/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: – Quadell ^(talk) 00:23, 6 August 2011 (UTC)
Nominator: User:Khazar

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
	1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	The prose is excellent.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	MoS adhered to.
	2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	References section is fine
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Very well sourced. In my spotchecks, all claims are backed up by their sources, and I detected no plagiarism.
	2c. it contains no original research.	Not a problem.
	3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	All issues resolved.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Not a problem.
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	I think it's fine.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Not a problem.
	6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	All issues resolved.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Not a problem.
	7. Overall assessment.	Congratulations.

Resolved issues

• 1b: Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (lead section), the lede needs to summarize all sections of the article. The current three-sentence lead would be an excellent first paragraph, but about two more paragraphs need to be added that will summarize all sections.

• 1b: Although not necessary, I think an {{Infobox person}} would be useful, especially if a birthplace or birth year can be found.

• 2b: The information about HRW (at "Arrest and trial" and "International attention") is not sourced. The source is here.

• 3a: More information can and should be added. For instance, his 14 years of human rights work before his arrest is given only three sentences, but there is more info at People In Need and other sources. The sources also provide more information on "Imprisonment and health"; for instance his lawyer was threatened with violence if he continues to represent him, says this source. The "International attention" section is good, but People In Need quotes Askarov as saying "I cried like a baby. There are no words to express my heartfelt joy." when he received the Homo Hominy award, which would be a nice addition in my opinion (not a requirement).

• 6a: There are two photos that are not freely licensed, and they have a couple problems. For one thing, Wikipedia:Non-free content criteria states "Multiple items of non-free content are not used if one item can convey equivalent significant information." In practice, this has been interpreted to mean that it is almost never acceptable to have two non-free photos of a person in a biography. You'll have to choose one, I'm afraid. Also, there are problems with the sourcing. Both images have a "source" listed which is just a bare URL to where the image is displayed elsewhere on the web; there is no information about the photographer, copyright holder, or date of the photograph. After digging a little, I found that the "bruises" photo is here sourced to Nurbek Toktakunov, his lawyer, and was taken June 22, 2010. So if you choose to use this image, I think it will be fine. I can't find any reliable information about the other image.