Talk:Atom Heart Mother/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 10:54, 8 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
UK or U.K., US or U.S., be consistent
Done MOS:ABBR suggests UK and US, though I've seen other editors change US to U.S. and cite WP:MOS for it. --Ritchie333 ^(talk) ^(cont) 14:43, 24 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The album cover was, again," - suggest removal of again, eg "was, as their previous recordings, designed..."
Done Changed to "The cover was, like earlier albums,"

"Zabriskie Point" leads to a valley
Done Disambiguated to Zabriskie Point (film) - wikilink was also misspelled

"and the earliest documented live performance was on 17 January 1970[8] at Hull University,[9] followed by an early television performance (featuring just the band) on 28 April.[10] " - propose to split this part and start a new sentence as confusing
Done This is because the source for KQED was found before the source for the first gig. I've moved the former fact into the "legacy" section, which deals with performances outside of the scope of recording the studio version.

"managed... manageable" - propose to replace one of these words with synonyms
Done Changed to "The band felt that the live performances developed the piece into a manageable shape."

"Unfortunately" - dramatic word; suggest removal
Done Removed

"Fortunately" - ditto
Done Reworded
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Good
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