Talk:Astri Aasen/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eviolite (talk · contribs) 01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll take a look at this one today or tomorrow. eviolite (talk) 01:46, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Here are my notes:

Sourcing is good.
- Thank you
Alfsen source gives specific birth and death date (3 Sep 1875-10 Oct 1935), this should probably be incorporated (unless there are weird date-format issues)
- Thanks, didn't notice that. I used Pushaw as the outline here and for some reason he does not give the dates.
Is there a particular reason why the current name "Trondheim" is not given (as the sources seem to use it), or just that the names are similar enough?
- I remember that there is at least one source that spells it this way, but since it's not Pushaw (probably the most authoritative source on her life), I've changed it back to Trondheim.
Looking at source [2], it says that her father went bankrupt in 1887, not died; I don't speak Norwegian but it says I 1887 gikk faren konkurs and it seems konkurs has no definition besides "bankrupt". On the other hand it says her two older sisters died when she was 17, which may warrant inclusion.
- Not sure where this comes from, thanks. I've removed it and added the information about her sisters. The bankruptcy doesn't seem to matter, but it can be added in if you'd like.
The source also seems to say she began painting in Bergen (even though she was a retoucher in Alesund) - probably warrants clarification.
- Unfortunately, this is all I can find. I've added a bit that she learned in Bergen, and clarified the chronology
In Aasen's portrait, Finskog wears a green dress—a colored garment (a gákti) that was earlier hindered by pastor Lars Levi Laestadius's fundamentalist branch of Christianity (Laestadianism), though they increased in popularity in the 1840s Hindered in what way? It might just be my reading but it makes it sound like that specific dress was hindered. This sentence also feels a bit unwieldy, but I'm not sure how to rectify that.
- which became discouraged under ... Laestadius says Pushaw, so I'm not sure. I've made some adjustments for flow, hopefully it's better
Who said "passive participants", Pushaw or Lindholm?
- Pushaw, changed
Are there any substantial details about any of Aasen's other paintings?
- Nothing that I have been able to find - almost everything seems to be a basic overview of her life, or as in the case of Pushaw, about her relationship to the Sámi congress. The bit about geometric shapes is as far as I can get. Here's a beautiful photo for you, though, since I can't find much else :/
"Following the event" - which event?
- Congress, changed

Otherwise, the article is interesting and reads pretty well. I've made some minor copyedits as well, feel free to revert if they're not an improvement. @Urve: Placing on hold pending the above. eviolite (talk) 02:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks so much, Eviolite. Responded inline above. Urve (talk) 03:14, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the edits; I'm satisfied with the changes (after two minor grammatical changes) and am happy to promote this to GA. Great work! eviolite (talk) 03:19, 3 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]