Talk:Asian elephant/GA1
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Nominator: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 18:53, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Magentic Manifestations (talk · contribs) 05:40, 14 May 2024 (UTC)
Will be taking this up for review. Expect comments soon. Thanks!
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | comments below. 
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | Do a simple check. There are simple issues like links to non-existent articles. Others as part of comments below.
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | Page nos./links are missing in most book sources
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | |
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2c. it contains no original research. | On dip stick of few sections, there are many lines which are not sourced or poorly sourced. Comments below.
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | As per Earwig, it is fine. |
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | Addressed
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | Fairly precise |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | Adheres to NPOV |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | Relatively stable, no major conflicts |
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | The usage of images and the captions need to be worked upon. a. Images have been added like a vertical gallery which spills out of sections E.g. Refer to the first three sections |
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7. Overall assessment. | @Wolverine XI I have put this on hold for the time being. In the few sections that have been reviewed, it is found that the article needs working, particularly in terms of providing citations as there are multiple lines no valid references and page nos./link for quoted citations, expansion of sections, apart from other issues. It would be better if you do a re-check on the entire article based on the citations. From the comments, it might be concluded that the article fails some of the basic criteria. But I believe that discussing with the respective GA nominator to consider how the article concerned can be reworked and the changes can be made quite quickly with conscious effort, the nominator be willing. First, we need to agree on it and I look forward to hearing your response.
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Comments
[edit]Lead
[edit]1. from India in the west, Nepal in the north, Sumatra in the south, and to Borneo in the east. India in the west to Borneo in the east and Nepal in the north to Sumatra in the South?
- Fixed (modified it,
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2. small ears folded laterally in contrast to African elephants smaller ears than African elephants or lateral folding is different compared to African?
- Specified (modified it, )
3. may be depigmented on the trunk, ears or neck and/or?
- Or ()
4. Female captive elephants have lived beyond 60 years when kept in semi-natural surroundings, such as forest camps. In zoos, Asian elephants die at a much younger age; Normal lifespan of wild elephants?
- Added (modified it, )
5. Lead can have a line on intelligence?
- Added (modified it, )
Taxonomy
[edit]1. Three subspecies are recognised:
a. IUCN source does not talk about sub-species?
- It does ()
b. The table gives four sub-species when it is indicated as three?
- The last one (Bornean) is uncertain
- Fixed (modified it, )
c. The usage of table is suspect here. If a table is used, better to split into species/image/description/distribution
- No need, removed table ()
d. There is no explanation on the demarcation between the sub-species
- There's no need for that While not a requirement from GA per say, would be better if there is some explanation on the demarcation features
- Added something
2. but not a living elephant in accordance with the rules of the International Code of Zoological Nomenclature Primary source does not have link/page nos.
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3. The Asian elephants living in northern Borneo are smaller than all the other subspecies, but with larger ears, a longer tail, and straight tusks source?
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4. The following Asian elephants were proposed as extinct subspecies, but are now considered synonymous with the Indian elephant
a. The source indicates that Deraniyagala identified 12 sub species 8 living but the classification (above 3 + Borneo + below 3 = 7) does not match. There is no naming of the species.
- That is from 1955. Today there are only 3 subspecies not 8. And most sources concur that only those 3 extinct subspecies are valid. (Modified, )
b. The list is again based on the source already indicated with no link/page nos.
- The link is there ()
5. The two groups are estimated to have split from each other around 7 million years ago Source does not mention this, page no.?
- You need to pay to access the whole study Then it becomes unverifiable, you need to find an alternate source!
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6. Elephas originated in Sub-Saharan Africa during the Pliocene and spread throughout Africa before expanding into the southern half of Asia. No page no. or link provided for the book source
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Description
[edit]1. The forehead has two hemispherical bulges, unlike the flat front of the African elephants The enamel plates of the molars are greater in number and closer together in Asian elephants. Some bulls may also lack tusks; these individuals are called "filsy makhnas", and are especially common among the Sri Lankan elephant population These lines quote a book source with page no. 208. As per the contents of the book, elephants are described in page 141 and it cannot be verified as well.
- Fixed given link does not have the required pages, assuming good faith here for the first citation. Additional references have been added for the others. ()
2. A tusk from an 11 ft (3.4 m) tall elephant killed by Sir Victor Brooke measured 8 ft (2.4 m) in length, and nearly 17 in (43 cm)... Please add page no. 522/523 to source
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3. The largest bull elephant ever recorded was shot by the Maharajah of Susang in the Garo Hills of Assam, India, in 1924, it weighed an estimated 7 t (7.7 short tons), stood 3.43 m (11.3 ft) tall at the shoulder and was 8.06 m (26.4 ft) long from head to tail Add page no. 17 to Guinness book source
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Distribution and habitat
[edit]1. Asian elephants are distributed throughout the Indian subcontinent and Southeast Asia, from India in the west, Nepal in the north, Sumatra in the south, and to Borneo in the east Same as lead
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2. It inhabit They inhabit
- Fixed ()
3. In Bangladesh, some isolated populations survived in the south-east Chittagong Hills in the early 1990s no page nos.
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4. In 2011, the Asian elephant population in India was estimated at 26,000–28,000 individuals. Updated data available for 2017, please refer to Project Elephant
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4. As of 2019, the wild population was estimated at 48,323–51,680 individuals This is in India or worldwide?
- Specified ()
Ecology and behaviour
[edit]1. Asian elephants are recorded to make three basic sounds.. Sourced from a single book source with no page no.
- Page no is 142 ()
Reproduction
[edit]1. observed 3 weeks from three weeks
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2. The gestation period is 18–22 months, and the cow gives birth to one calf, only occasionally twins. The calf is fully developed by the 19th month, but stays in the womb to grow so that it can reach its mother to feed. At birth, the calf weighs about 100 kg (220 lb), and is suckled for up to three years. Once a female gives birth, she usually does not breed again until the first calf is weaned, resulting in a four to five-year birth interval. Source?
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Intelligence
[edit]1. They exhibit a wide variety of behaviours, including those associated with grief, learning, allomothering, mimicry, play, altruism, use of tools, compassion, cooperation, self-awareness, memory, and language source?
- Done ()
2. Sources with no pages/links e.g. "Elephant Bill", "Thirteen years among the wild beasts of India."
- Done ()
Threats
[edit]1. Few sources need links/relevant identifiers e.g. "An assessment of the human-elephant conflict in Sri Lanka.", "Elephant raiders and rogues."
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2. Prime elephant habitat cleared for jhum—a type of shifting cultivation practiced in Arunachal Pradesh Source for it being prime elephant habitat?
- Source already there (modified, )
3. In India alone, over 400 people are killed by elephants every year, and 0.8 to 1 million hectares are damaged, affecting at least 500,000 families across the country. Moreover, elephants are known to destroy crops worth up to US$2–3 million annually Data for which period?
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4. The demand for ivory during the 1970s and 1980s, particularly in East Asia, led to rampant poaching and the serious decline of elephants in both Africa and Asia. source?
- Source already provided ()
5. Young elephants are captured and illegally imported to.. captured from where?
- The wild ()
6. The section of handling should come with captivity. In fact, as the captivity section talks nothing about conservation, it is better to merge and place it under threats.
- Moved handling section, but made In captivity into its own section ()
7. The EEHVs are member What is EEHV?
- Fixed (modified, )
8. as many as 70 deaths of both zoo and wild Asian elephants worldwide, period?
- Fixed ()
Conservation
[edit]1. Section needs expansion. It barely talks about conservation measures in countries with elephant pop. India having the largest pop. has no mention, Project Elephant? What about conservation of other sub-species in SL, SE Asia?
- Added info ()
2. In total, the covered protected area in China is about 510,000 km2 (200,000 sq mi) Source says hectares and not km2?
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3. In recent years the National Park has faced issues due to encroachment and over-exploitation. In India, the National Board of Wildlife recommended to allow coal mining in Dehing Patkai National Park in April 2020. The decision raised concerns between students and environmental activists who launched an online campaign to stop the project Should be part of threats?
- Wouldn't make much sense there ()
Captivity
[edit]1. The entire section talks about issues w.r.t to captive elephants in zoos rather than conservation. Also, it does not talk about the usage of elephants (section on handling briefly mentions some instances) in captivity for other uses such as for recreation, work, religious activities etc.
2. About half of the global zoo elephant population is kept in European zoos source?
- Source there ()
3. where they have about half the median life span of conspecifics in protected populations in range countries 18.9 years for zoos, and 41.7; 18.9 is not half of 41.7! Better to mention the nos.
- Addressed. I do not want the phrasing to be too close. (modified, data can be specific, )
4. infant mortality is twice that seen in Burmese timber camps, and adult survivorship in zoos has not improved significantly in recent years 2.3 and 3.4 times greater as per source
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5. Foot problems are commonly observed in captive elephants. These are related to lack of exercise, long hours standing on hard substrates, and contamination resulting from standing in their dung. Many of these problems are treatable. However, mistreatment may lead to serious disability or death No page no/link
- Replaced ()
In culture
[edit]1. Bones of Asian elephants excavated at Mohenjo-daro in the Indus Valley indicate that they were tamed in the Indus Valley Civilisation and used for work. Decorated elephants are also depicted on seals and were modelled in clay Source has no page no./link
- I don't have access to that source is unverifiable, need a different source
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2. The Asian elephant became a siege engine, a mount in war, a status symbol, a beast of burden, and an elevated platform for hunting during historical times in South Asia Source has no page no./link
- The link and page numbers are already provided ()
3. Asian elephants have been captured from the wild... Apart from the last line, most of the paragraph is not sourced
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4. The Asian elephant plays an important ... The source does not have page no/links; Not sure if the source attests to the facts in the paragraph.
- Yes & addressed. ()
5. The manuscript Hastividyarnava is from Assam in northeast India. In the Burmese, Thai and Sinhalese animal and planetary zodiac, the Asian elephant, both tusked and tuskless, are the fourth and fifth animal zodiacs of the Burmese, the fourth animal zodiac of the Thai.. None of the sentences are sourced
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Suggestion: Asian elephant is the national animal of Thailand and is the national heritage animal of India. You may incorporate this in the last section.
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