Talk:Ashy flycatcher/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:16, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 03:38, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I saw this species myself when I was in South Africa! Some general comments for now; I have a detailed look soon.

Any chance to get a distribution map? In my opinion, these are super important and essential.
- Will ask another editor, not really great at these myself.
Males and females look identical I assume? Worth mentioning I think.
- Added.
Is it strictly resident or migratory? Could be mentioned. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 03:38, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Added.
What about a box with links to sound examples from xeno canto, as done is some other bird articles? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 03:42, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Added.
ashy blue-grey flycatcher, bluegrey flycatcher – I think these are different spellings of the same name, not different names.
- Removed.
species's placement – better "placement of the species"?
- Done.
both of these species – "these two species"?
- Done.
Iris color, leg color and bill color? Should be mentioned I think.
- Added,
has a varied repertoire of call types and many different calls – isn't "and many different calls" redundant?
- No, call types are basically types of calls, distinguished by their function, and different calls refers to different calls within each type.
I would link song and call. Not every reader knows the difference between the two, I think.
- Linked both, but I think they both currently redirect to the same article.
Ashy flycatchers also have a variety of calls, – already mentioned
- Reworded.
The ashy flycatcher is mainly breeds – grammar
- Fixed.
western South Africa – are you sure? I saw one in eastern South Africa.
- Fixed.
- BOW states "south along western South Africa", and the range map there also only shows it occurring in western SA.
  - That should be a mistake, and their range map clearly shows it in eastern SA, not western. The IUCN range map also shows it in eastern SA. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 13:34, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    - Man I really need some sleep, fixed.
link woodland, not everybody knows what the difference is between woodland and forest.
- Done.
What do you think about a "similar species" section? I think this is what many readers are primarily interested in (since they want to identify their observation).
- Added.
That's all I have! Nice article. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 05:49, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Addressed all inline. Thanks for the review, this was an article I wrote a while back, so was missing a lot of stuff it should've had. AryKun (talk) 15:00, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  Thank you, looks good, I am promoting now, assuming that you will ask somebody to make a nice range map ;) Jens Lallensack (talk) 15:14, 5 September 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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