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Peer Review- by Shanzeh

Hey Heidi! I hope this helps!

Arthrographis kalrae

I think you need to have: {{dashboard.wikiedu.org sandbox}} on the top of your sandbox when you “edit source”

General: I notice that you have spaces to input an image, but you haven’t put up any yet. I checked, and couldn't find any on your fungus. Perhaps you can find something under one of its synonyms.

It would also be nice to have an introductory paragraph before you start elaborating under sub-headings- just giving an overall view of your species, what it is, what it infects, why is it important, and then elaborate below. To do this, you can even look at the articles provided by Professor Scott from previous students.

I’m not sure why your article is showing up as a code on the ‘Read’ page. Update: spoke to Dr Scott and he fixed the general structure.


Taxobox: In your Taxobox, you've misspelt the class and order. It should be Dothideomycetes and Eremomycetaceae. You also have a sub-class also, if you want: Dothideomycetidae.

History and Taxonomy: Your last two points don't have an in-text citation.

Conidiogenesis and morphology: In your second sub-heading- remember to capitalize the first letter (and not the second) when you edit.

Physiology: I'd put links for: arthroconidia and cycloheximide

Pathogenicity: You could talk about who is most commonly infected-

eg. People who like to garden? Scientists in the lab? I think you can add more here. If it infects humans, is it dimorphic? (I read some papers which said it is- in references section) Is it a common human pathogen or rare? Is it an opportunistic pathogen (as indicated by its prevalence in immunocompromised patients)

Need more context here- what is IgG and Il4? What does the response do?

Second bullet point- I know this is just rough and in bullet points, but be careful of grammar when you expand the article. There are a lot of commas and semi-colons that aren't grammatically correct.

-Typo-Severe*

Epidemiology:

What is HSCT?

Treatments: How long would an individual have to be on these drugs? Why do these drugs work? What do they target on the fungus? Links below for the drug names

Expand on the laboratory diagnosis section- what does it mean? What kind of tests do they run to confirm its presence> Is it different clinically and in the laboratory?

Techniques:

What is the purpose of these techniques? Are they used to identify the fungus?

Add wiki links to words that may need further explanation- eg. Saprophyte, conidia, drug names etc.

I don’t think you need the <nowiki> when you’re writing Fungi/Ascomycota in the Taxobox. Update: spoke to Dr. Scott and we fixed up that section as well.

I don't see a reference 12.

• Some links you could go through:

Agirlhassomename (talk) 23:59, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

CUIQINGY's peer review

Hi Heidi, I think the outline is generally good and below are some of my suggestions for you :).

Lead:

  • As you finalize your article, you will need to create a lead by summarizing the most important basic information to introduce your fungus.


History and taxonomy:

  • It may be better to move the third point about pathogenetic strains to pathogenecity section, as compare to history and taxonomy, areas of pathogenecity strains isolation is probably more suitable to be placed under pathogenecity.
  • No reference tag for the last two points.


Conidiogenesis and morphology:

  • This section is really easy to read. You clearly described the most important features and followed by description of colony morphology from initial growth to later in development
  • Forgot to capitalize the first letter of this sub-heading.
  • Would be better to add more details: on mycobank (link: http://www.mycobank.org/BioloMICS.aspx?TableKey=14682616000000063&Rec=11453&Fields=All) you can find literature that include detailed descriptions of Arthrographis kalrae. For example, you may condider adding that A. kalrae have narrow branched conidiophores which usually appear in bundles to the fourth point to make it more comprehensive. Despite that, can also add more information about the morphology of ascospores, hyphae and blastoconidia to this section.


Physiology:

  • You may want to briefly explain arthroconidia or add wiki link.
  • I found several other points on mycobank that you may want to add or combine with existing points: Arthrographis kalrae is intolerant to benomyl, Keratinolytic, and in vitro hair perforation positive.
  • Change 15-45 & deg;C to 15-45 °C.


Pathogenicity:

  • It is great that you have thoroughly covered all of the most important aspects of pathogenecity and i really like that you mentioned the immune response in mouse model.
  • I think this section can be further improved by adding more specific details. There is a article I found (link: https://academic.oup.com/mmy/article/48/2/384/1016417) that can provide you with detailed description of onychomycosis caused by A. kalrae. You can probably find useful information from this paper for other sections as well. For example, the author mentioned that A. kalrae is keratinophilic which you may consider adding to physiology section.
  • Remember to include reference tag for each cited point.
  • Mis-spelled the word severe to sever.


Treatments: Antifungal therapies:

  • It is interesting to know different treatments and their effectiveness towards Arthrographis kalrae.
  • However, for the last point about effectiveness, you may want to specificy that this is a in vitro antifungal susceptibility patterns and need further clinical data to support.


Reference:

  • The last reference appears to be empty, you may need to try to cite again.


You really make your outline clear and straightforward by adding sub-headings and keep all points short with a logic flow. Hope my suggestions can help you. Good luck with your final article! CUIQINGY (talk) 19:26, 1 November 2018 (UTC)

Almorenor's Peer Review

General Comments

  • overall I really liked your layout, I think the addition of your own heading compared to the prof's template was excellent and relevant, the good information presented too
  • for the taxa box, I think you should add a citation link to where you got the Synonyms, I know they're cited, but just for formatting so that you get sent to the citation right away
  • I felt like you were missing citations under certain headings, for some of the points you made, will elaborate more when I talk about the section
  • You should hyperlink when talking about other species if the hyperlink Wikipedia page is available, same with terms that might not be common; this is a Wikipedia page so I think we should make sure any terms that might not be common knowledge should be hyperlinked so they can be easily defined, for example, hyphae, a high school student doing an assignment on thus fungus would not know what that word means - you did this in your fist sections but then stopped
  • there are a few more synonyms listed on mycobank, could be interesting to see what those turn up on your species

History and Taxonomy

  • your last two points are not cited, the reader cannot be sure where you got this information from

Condiogenesis and Morphology

  • good section, however as stated before maybe hyperlink some of the words, Conidiogenesis could be one as it is not a common term used

Physiology

  • you point about it being widely spread in soil is not really physiology, more like habitat, the following paper has a bit more information about its occurrence in natural and commercial soils:
    • Sugiura Y, Hironaga M. Arthrographis kalrae, a rare causal agent of onychomycosis, and its occurrence in natural and commercially available soils. Med Mycol. 2010 Mar;48(2):384-9

Pathogenicity

  • your first three points are not cited, the reader has no idea where you got the information from


The rest of your sections are well done and have relevant information I really liked them

Other articles/references to consider looking at

Here are some more paper I found that could help in the building of your last four headings:

Almorenor (talk) 22:52, 2 November 2018 (UTC)

Some suggestions

  • references and formatting look OK
  • I fixed your taxobox and synonyms and did some editing in your text which hopefully will be useful as you develop your final article
  • I added this useful reference: [[[1]]]
  • repaired the sandoval reference
  • lots of things you could link

Medmyco (talk) 19:54, 17 November 2018 (UTC)

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