Talk:Arnold Fothergill/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 06:21, 17 October 2013 (UTC)

Comments—

• I'd suggest to add a couple of sentences to the 1st para of the lead.
  • Any suggestions of what to put in them? I think, given the short length of the article, that the lead is about the right length myself? Harrias ^talk 21:47, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• Marylebone Cricket Club → Marylebone Cricket Club (MCC) Since you use abbreviations afterwards in the article.
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "... facing sixteen men from Weston-super-Mare,..." Not sure what you mean by this.
  • Clarified. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• Throughout 1880, he was regularly Somerset's leading wicket-taker in their matches, he collected five wickets in an innings against the Marylebone Cricket Club (MCC) twice,[8] Hertfordshire,[9] and Leicestershire.[10] → The sentence not clearly says the things you want to explain?!
  • I'm not sure: the intention is to make it clear he was doing well, does it not do that? Harrias ^talk 21:47, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• first-class cricket debut → first-class debut
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "The following month, he featured for Somerset in was is generally considered to be their first match of the first-class cricket, against Lancashire." Something is disturbed/missing in the sentence, I think?
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• the only time he achieved this in first-class cricket.[20] → the only occasion he achieved the feat in first-class cricket.[20]
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "in an early season match" → "in an early-seasoned match"?
  • Clarified. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• Major Gardner Warton → any link for Major?
• first-change bowler, → may be unfamiliar to non-experts
  • Added a note. Harrias ^talk 21:47, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "...an innings and 202 run victory." → an innings and 202-run victory.
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "In all, he took 119 first-class wickets at an average of 18.18. His highest score was the 74 runs he scored on his debut.[2]" These sentences should be in "First-class cricket" section, not in "Test cricketer".
  • The section is chronological, rather than intended to only discuss his Test achievements, and as his second Test was his final first-class appearance, it is the most fitting place: to put it before the Test matches would be illogical. Harrias ^talk 21:47, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "He made his final appearance for Somerset in 1889, against Staffordshire, he took 157 wickets for the county in total,[35] of which 57 came in first-class matches.[36]" Semi-colon instead of comma after Staffordshire.
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• "...,Wisden suggest that his returned to Tyneside at the end of his professional cricket career." → "he" instead of "his".
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 21:47, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• In the refs, link ESNcricinfo on first occasion no on second.
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)
• Provide suitable alt text for the images.
  • Done. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)

I'm putting this one on hold for a weak. Zia Khan 06:21, 17 October 2013 (UTC)

I've responded to some of the points, but don't have time at the moment to get to the rest: will do in the next day or two. Harrias ^talk 06:40, 22 October 2013 (UTC)

I have responded to, if not addressed, each of your comments. Harrias ^talk 21:47, 22 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll look into this ASAP. Zia Khan 20:39, 23 October 2013 (UTC)

Assessment

GA review (see Wikipedia:Good article criteria and WP:GACN)

1. Well written.

   a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (well referenced): b (citations to reliable sources): c (Wikipedia:No original research):

3. Broad in its coverage.

   a (covers major aspects): b (well focused):

4. Neutral .

   Fair representation, no bias:

5. Stable.

   No edit wars nor disputed contents:

6. Illustrated appropriately by images.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Conclusion: Good work on the article. Keep it up! Zia Khan 00:06, 26 October 2013 (UTC)

   Pass/Fail: