Talk:Arizona Libertarian Party/GA1

GA Review

This good article review failed (quick fail) --DannyS712 (talk) 01:58, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: DannyS712 (talk · contribs) 01:43, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Notes

I have quick-failed this good article review - the grammar of the article is too far from the standards of Good Articles (It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria). Even just looking at Arizona Libertarian Party#1970s:

The Arizona Libertarian Party was one of the earliest affiliates to be formed with it having 35 dues paying members by late 1972 and was planning on holding a state convention to plan on how to seek legal recognition as a party.
1. Run on sentence
2. affiliates of what?
3. when was it first formed? It had 35 dues paying members by late 1972, so it must have been before then
4. "was planning on..." - did it hold one, or not?
In 1973 the party was organized and elected its officials and the following year had grown to over 200 members.
1. Organized by whom? If the party organized itself, it should be in active voice
2. What officials?
In January 1975, the affiliate announced that it would begin its first ballot access drive to collect the 11,044 signatures need to gain ballot access for the 1976 elections and by June had submitted petitions with 9,913 signatures with plans to submit the remaining signatures later.
1. Run on sentence
2. Why is it being referred to as the affiliate and now the party?
3. "needed to gain ballot access"
However, the deadline for the signatures passed while officials were counting, but the Libertarian Party was successful in gaining a court ordered extension to the deadline and were given ballot access after the counting concluded on July 21.
1. What officials? Party officials? State officials?
2. Counting what?
3. "extension to the deadline" sounds awkward
4. When was the deadline? The last time mentioned was January
The affiliate's 1978 state convention was attended by Washington Post columnist Nicholas von Hoffman and former Republican Representative Sam Steiger whom addressed them on political fundraising.
1. Again, "affiliate"
2. "whom addressed them"
Under Arizona law at the time in order for a party to maintain recognition it must receive 5% of the total votes cast and under that rule the party only received 1.4% of the total votes.
1. Recognition of what?
2. "it must" is present tense, this is discussion the past
3. "under that rule the party... total votes" - what does this mean?
The party officially lost its recognition on March 1, 1978, when the Arizona Supreme Court ruled 3-2 that Arizona's ballot access law was constitutional.
1. When did it gain its recognition? Only gaining ballot access was discussed
2. What does the Arizona Supreme Court have to do with anything? No court challenge was mentioned

These are the issues with just the first section. I'm sorry, but this article is too far from the criteria. --DannyS712 (talk) 01:57, 8 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.