Talk:Ariel (The Little Mermaid)/GA1
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 17:23, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
- Characteristics
- "She is often seen in the company of Flounder, her best friend, and Sebastian, her father's advisor and her overseer." The word "overseer" is usually used in a work context, describing someone in charge of a group of workmen, so isn't really the right word here.
- "Ariel regains her rebellious personality from the first film and disobeys her father's orders when he decrees music to be banned in Atlantica by running away with Sebastian and his band." That's rather muddled. She disobeys her father's orders by running away with Sebastian and his band? Her father's orders were that music was to be banned, nothing to do with running away with anyone. And the king didn't decree that music was to be banned by running away.
The Little Mermaid II: Return to the Sea
- "Melody stops her by grabbing the trident and returning it to King Triton". Stops her from doing what?
- "... humans and merfolk are allowed to coexist". They always coexisted, that can't be allowed or forbidden, but what we were told earlier was that it was contact between the two that was forbidden.
- Okay I've reworded those segments. Any further suggestions?--GroovySandwichYum. 00:19, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
- Nope, everything looks fine to me now, congratulations. Malleus Fatuorum 00:21, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
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