Talk:Aqil Agha/GA1

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Reviewer: Cerebellum (talk · contribs) 22:15, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I will be reviewing this article. --Cerebellum (talk) 22:15, 27 November 2015 (UTC)[reply]

All right, great job on this! Very interesting read. I messed with the prose a little bit, but feel free to revert if you don't like my changes. I am going to pass as a GA, and below I've left you a few comments for further improvement.

The lead says "surname sometimes spelled Aga", but I don't think Agha is a surname; it seems to be a title, see Agha (Ottoman Empire), so that sentence should be changed to say "title." Maybe you could link to the page on the title as well.
We should include the Arabic version of his name, per WP:UEIA. The Arabic wikipedia doesn't have an article on him so I'm not exactly sure how to spell his name, but I think it is عقيل آغا الحاسي (based on this).
When you talk about the dowry for Aqil's daughter, what is PT?
Battle of Hattin section: When you say 'Aqil was reassigned to his powerful post in the region in 1855, what post do you mean? His post as a commander of irregulars?
Seems like something is wrong with the first paragraph of the Battle of Hattin section, it doesn't have a period after Karak and is followed by a bulleted point.
I think in the last paragraph, the sentence about being regarded in a positive light by modern-day sources and local tradition should have a reference. --Cerebellum (talk) 18:48, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Cerebellum: Thank you for the review and the pass. I addressed the issues you listed above, except for the Arabic script, which I've requested from a fellow editor. --Al Ameer (talk) 18:57, 6 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]