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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:56, 15 August 2016 (UTC)
Hey CaliforniaDreamsFan! Sorry for my long departure in the reviewing process, but I'll likely be doing a few more here and there. Since I'm not longer in the GA Cup, my reviews will just be coming in a bulleted list versus my previous section-by-section style. Here it goes:
- Remove "units" after "physical sales"
- "Musically, "Appears" is an dance song. It is written in third person perspective, and is about the third person watching a happy and loving relationship." --> "Musically, "Appears" is an dance song written in third person perspective, and is about the third person watching a happy and loving relationship."
- "300,000 unit" --> "300,000 units"
- I think you could connect the bottom two paragraphs in the lead
- "long-time" --> "longtime"
- "She stated that the song is about the third person watching a happy and loving relationship. "It's about lovers..." --> "She stated that the song is about the third person watching a happy and loving relationship: "It's about lovers..."
- ""Appears" was released by Avex Trax on November 10, 1999 as the sixth single from the album, which was also released on the same day. " --> Source?
- "2005–2006" --> "2005-06"
- "criticised" --> "criticized"
- "It lasted three weeks on the top 200, one of Hamasaki's lowest spanning singles in that chart." --> "It lasted three weeks on the top 200, becoming one of Hamasaki's lowest spanning singles in that chart."
- Add "2000" in parentheses after Super Eurobeat Presents Ayu-ro Mix
- Don't have to include "in 1999" for the "Recording" process
- Use two columns for the "Personnel" section please
- Too many countries in the "Digital download" section on the table; do you think this is necessary if at all?
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- a (prose): b (MoS):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
- No edit wars etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- A PD image and/or quote box may help break up the text.
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
On hold to allow for changes. Good luck as always. Carbrera (talk) 03:05, 15 August 2016 (UTC)
- @Carbrera: Hi Cabrera! No its all goods, no need to explain All finished with the adjustments and editing, good luck and regards! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 01:24, 17 August 2016 (UTC)