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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Eliseoh. Peer reviewers: Sayabery, Brandon.eng, KimCourtney.

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Edits made

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Hi, I am a student at Washington University. Thank you for letting me edit this article! I am currently doing research for this species for a class here, and have added some information in the hopes of deepening this article. I noticed that most of your information compares A. nigrocincta to A. cerana - I rearranged your information and put it under the category "Differences between A. cerana and A. nigrocincta." In addition, I have expanded the introduction, as well as adding the categories "Taxonomy and Phylogeny," "Description and Appearance," "Reproductive Structure and Function," "Distribution and Habitat," "Nest Structure," "Colony Cycle," "Queen," "Migration," "Waggle Dance," "Mating," "Mating Frequency," and "Defense."


(Eliseoh)

Comments

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Thank you for your contribution to the Wikipedia community! I felt that this article was actually very thorough and thanks to a peer editor, very well organized. I did some personal research on the Apis nigrocincta and found that you did very well in utilizing the information available. A lot is known about the Apis nigrocincta and a lot of studies have specifically been done on why it is now considered a separate species from Apis cerana. The "Differences between A. cerana and A. nigrocincta" heading was helpful in explaining the morphological themes. In your future research, I would consider perhaps looking to add information about their behavioral differences. It would add a lot of breadth to this already solid article. Brandon.eng (talk) 23:12, 1 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Response

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Thank you for your suggestions! I have edited the page accordingly. Eliseoh (talk) 04:14, 4 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Add map

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Add

this map

to the article — Preceding unsigned comment added by 91.182.100.6 (talk) 09:37, 5 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]


Edits for Class

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Hi! This page is very well developed, with a large range of information about several different aspects of the species. I made a few edits to improve the organization and cohesiveness of the page. To do this, I created bigger main headings that include Kin Selection and Behavior, and created subheadings underneath of them. I hoped that this would help a reader understand what "queen" meant--it would be under kin selection. Also by making categories like "waggle dance" and "mating" go underneath the bigger "behavior" heading, I thought it would be more clear in what context they were being referred to. In addition, I added some WIkilinks out to other Wikipedia pages, hoping to improve ease of access of external information for a reader. Another small suggestion would be to add an image of the bee, to help the reader visualize what you are referring to. Sayabery (talk) 02:12, 2 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Response

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Thank you for your suggestions! I have edited the page accordingly. Eliseoh (talk) 04:14, 4 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Edits and Comments

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Hi! This page was well-written and thorough with a lot of great information about the species. First of all, I saw the talk page was missing the course banner so I added it. Also, I made some minor edits in the "Reproductive Structure and Function" section to help with the flow of the paragraph. I liked how the previous reviewer changed the organization of the page. I think it makes the page easier to read and follow. To improve the page even more, I suggest fixing the descriptive overview. I think currently, there is much information about the distribution and habitat of the species but not much information that is interesting enough to hook the readers. Also, while I think the new addition of the section "Differences between A. cerana and A. nigrocincta" is interesting, there is no explanation of the significance of this section. I think the section could be improved by explaining its importance in the beginning of the section.Overall, I think the page was interesting and easy to read with solid information! ( KimCourtney (talk) 11:15, 1 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Response

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Thank you for your suggestions! I have edited the page accordingly. Eliseoh (talk) 04:14, 4 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Commenting

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Great article! Some suggestions – improving the introductory blurb. This intro section would benefit from being slightly longer, perhaps including facts about nesting cycle, and “famous” behaviors, like the waggle dance. The article would also benefit greatly from visual aids. I would check flickr to start. I think an expansion on the section on male endophallic ornamentation might also be really interesting.

Finally, I think this article would benefit from the last header being broken up. I would rename the last header to “Interspecies Interaction”. Under this header, I would add subheaders for the differences between A. nigrocincta and A. cerana. Under a separate subheader (perhaps, “Parasites”) I would discuss the Varroa. This breaks up the organization of the article into a more logical progression. Great job so far. Narayanan anagha (talk) 05:40, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Final Edits

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Hello, I am an undergraduate student at Washington University in St. Louis editing this page for a class assignment. For this article, I was able to help improve the article by making the wording sound more neutral from an unbiased viewpoint. Specifically, I was able to omit subjective modifiers or verbs from sentences to make the wording sound more neutral. For example, in “Mating Frequency”, a subsection of “Behavior”, I changed “A. nigrocincta queens mate with an extremely high number of males…” to “A. nigrocincta queens mate with a relatively high number of males compared to queens of other bee species…” by eliminating the subjective word “extremely” and replacing it with more clear, objective wording “relatively high compared to queens of other species”. Keep up the good work, this article obviously needs to be reevaluated from being promoted from "Start-class" to at least "B-class" or possibly "Good Article". May need more pictures of your actual bee. Marcus.kwon (talk) 05:51, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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