Talk:Anytime You Need a Friend/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 19:35, 6 July 2011 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

• Lead info

1. ""Anytime You Need a Friend" is a song by American singer-songwriter Mariah Carey, first released on May 31, 1994 by Columbia Records as the fourth and final single from Carey's third studio album, Music Box (1993). Written and produced by Carey and Walter Afanasieff, the song draws influence..." → ""Anytime You Need a Friend" is a song by American singer-songwriter Mariah Carey. The song was written and produced by Carey and Walter Afanasieff, for her third studio album, Music Box (1993). It was released on May 31, 1994 through Columbia Records, as the fourth and final single from the album. The song draws influence...". Keep in line with other GA's, flows more.
2. "The song was well received by contemporary music critics, many of which felt Carey's large spanning vocal range on the song, as well as its gospel influence was missing on most of Music Box." → They felt her vocal range? Re-word. Perhaps "many of which praised Carey's wide spanning vocal range". No need for "on the song", it's obvious it's on the song.
3. "the song achieved strong worldwide charting, placing at number twelve on the Billboard Hot 100, however becoming her first single to miss the top-ten." Tense issues. "the song achieved strong worldwide chart positions and peaked at number twelve on the US Billboard Hot 100, but became her first single to miss out the top-ten."
4. I don't think you need to live five live performances in the lead, two would be sufficient. You go into the detail of them in the Live performance section, the sentence is a bit long winded.
5. "the song served as a closing number", re-word.
6. "Apart from the several" → "Even though several"

• Composition

1. "Anytime you Need a Friend" → "You"
2. "borrows" → Has she given them back? lol, change that word.
3. The vocal range is wrong but I know there is nothing you can do about that.

• Critical reception

1. "Billboard Hot 100" → "US...100"
2. "The song debuted at number forty-five on the chart and eventually peaked at number twelve, remaining in the top-forty for eighteen weeks and on the chart for twenty-one." WP:OR
3. You should mention that the song topped the Hot Dance charts.

• Music videos

1. remove "single's", "The music video" is fine.
2. "black and white." → "black and white fashion". Keep consistency with the Lead.
3. "The video begins with scenes of Carey walking down a long New York street, with the addition of close ups of Carey's face. As she stares down the road, she witnesses a small girl, sitting alone in an alley corner, glaring into the sky. As the first chorus begins, Carey enters a large foyer, with a choir dressed in black singing perched atop a large staircase. During the second verse, she similarly witnesses an older man, who it sitting on a withered stoop." WP:OR Source?
4. "Consecutively, during the song's bridge, Carey watches as the small child's mother carries her to a nearby playground where her friends are frolicking and playing. Similarly, the elderly man is met with some other elderly citizens, who accompany him to another building nearby. During the song's climax, Carey joins the choir, flailing her hands wildly towards the sky, and smiling and gazing into the cloudy morning." Again, WP:OR
5. "It is filmed in black and white" → "It is also filmed in black and white"
6. Video Still: "In the still, Carey is seen singing with her hands in the sky. Behind her stand the choir, perched on the large stairwell. Critics noted the inclusions of God and religion in the video, during moments such as this when prayer to God is imminent." WP:OR. Add a source from the reception of the video to back up your point. I don't think the "Carey is seen singing with her hands in the sky" is needed. You need to say what happens before and after to give context and why it belongs in the article, see here. Re-write the description. (The picture scrapes a pass for rationale).

• Live performances

1. Change "through" to "on"
2. "on the David Letterman Show" → "the" is capitalised in the Lead.
3. "Carey appeared on the program wearing a black blouse and matching short skirt". WP:OR and fancruft? Is this necessary? It's only a blouse and a pair of shorts, it's not as if it was a designer evening gown which played a significant part in the theatricality of the performance. This goes a bit off topic and focus, there is a difference between listing relevant info and then listing things for the sake of it. What is the significance of her wearing a blouse and shorts?
4. "For the song, several male and female background vocalists took stage behind Carey, all sharing five appointed microphones" WP:OR The microphone bit is not necessary.
5. "program Top of the Pops, German entertainment show Wetten, dass..?, Hey Hey It's Saturday in Australia, and the 1993 Japanese Music Fair.[46]" WP:OR? I can't verify that author and look up what he has written. Look for other sources from website regarding those four performances, there will be records of them.
6. "Carey's performance of the song at an intimate concert at Proctor's Theatre on July 15, 1993 was filmed and released as the VHS Here Is Mariah Carey.[47]" WP:OR? Again, I know you have provided a source, but I can't check it. Google it and find a source from a website.
7. "Carey performed the song throughout her Music Box Tour (1993) and Daydream World Tour (1996). During the shows in 1993, Carey featured the song as the fifteenth song on the set-list, and was performed in a similar fashion as on her televised appearances.[46]" WP:OR? "..."
8. "During her shows at the Tokyo Dome during 1996, Carey sported a long and wavy hairstyle, while wearing a long black gown.[47] She sang the original version of the song, up until half way through the last chorus, until merging into the C+C remix. Several background vocalists were once again featured on stage, all donning black garbs.[47]". WP:OR? Is there not a free e-book or e-journal you can use? Same for the rest of this paragraph.

• Other versions

1. "In a review done by Digital Spy for Leona Lewis' debut album, Spirit, Nick Levine felt the song "Footprints in the Sand" borrowed heavily from Carey's track, writing "'Footprints In The Sand' seems hellbent on revisiting Mariah Carey's schlock-pop masterwork 'Anytime You Need A Friend'."[56] Leona should come before Eoghan, he didn't peform the song on X Factor for a year after Spirit was released. The line about AGT chould come last as that was in 2009.

• References

1. 3 Erroneous links (One dead, two re-directed)

As with the Underneath the Stars article, you have relied heavily on those three authors, which are sources that I can't verify because I can't access them. Unfortunately, there are multiple cases of WP:OR, some because no source is provided, and some because even though a source is provided, they are inaccessible. Even though the article is very detailed, I think some parts are too focused, and start going into things which are just not needed nor relevant, you just need to reign in it a bit and select what you include more carefully, in addition to the prose issues as well as the music video still caption. Sorry but I am failing this article. Calvin • ⁹⁹⁹ 13:48, 7 July 2011 (UTC)