Talk:Anton II of Georgia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 16:35, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Full disclosure: I am a WIki Cup and GA Cup participant, I have my own GANs (CMLL World Tag Team Championship and CMLL World Welterweight Championship) and I also have a Feature Article (CMLL World Heavyweight Championship) and Feature List (Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship) candidates in need of input. Not that it's a factor in my review but it would be appreciated.

I am aware that there is a topic ban for the nominator but I figure if I do the review perhaps other wikipedias will pick it up and get issues resolved. At least we've tried. I am about to start my review of this article, normally I provide my input in bits and pieces over a day or two so expect running updates for a while. MPJ-US 16:35, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GA Toolbox

I like to get this checked out first, I have found issues using this that has led to quick fails so it's important this passes muster.

Copyright violations Tool

Checking through all the results I do not see any concerns. Y

Disambiguation links

No concerns Y

External links

The qim.ge links all have redirects, that is something you may consider updating to prevent link rot in the future.
No issues Y

Well Written

"presence of the empress" should be "presence of empress"
"refusal to maintain its troops in protection of Georgia", hmm not sure, it seems off. Something akin to "in the protection of Georgia"?

Catholicos Patriarch

He was not known as Anton at that point correct? should be referred to as whatever his name was at the time
"That same year, he succeeded, at the age of 25,", I would rewrite that sentence. trying to cram too much stuff in there for it to flow well.
"In 1791, he helped bring about the temporary reconciliation in western Georgia between his sisterly nephew King Solomon II of Imereti and his rival David II." should be "In 1791, he helped bring about a temporary reconciliation in western Georgia between his nephew King Solomon II of Imereti and Solomon II's rival David II."
"At the time when Anton became the catholicos,", should be " By the time"
"Russian administration was anxious of the patriarch's" - "Anxious of" should be replaced by something along the lines of "worried about" or words to that effect.
"The questions were also raised about Anton's links" should start with just "Questions"
"Anton declined invitation" should be "Anton declined the invitation"
"Anton declined invitation by the lay procurator of the Russian Holy Synod, Prince Alexander N. Golitsyn, of 6 November 1809, on grounds of ill-health, but the requests became more insistent after General Tormasov received intelligence that Anton's rebel nephew Levan, with his Ossetian bands, was preparing to seize the catholicos." massive, multi subject, run-on sentence. Please revise it.
from his office" should be "from office", he was removed from his position, not the physical office he was sitting in.
"appointed as the first exarch a Georgian, Varlaam Eristavi," should be "appointed Georgian Varlaam Eristavi as the first exarch"
"To lessen the impact of the loss of independence, the Russian government appointed as the first exarch a Georgian, Varlaam Eristavi, who was relieved of his duties in 1817 due to his delays in implementing new policies." that should probably be split into two sentences.
"In 1811, Anton, at his own request, was moved to Moscow, but in 1812 he was evacuated to Tambov due to Napoleon's occupation of Moscow. He returned to St. Petersburg in 1819, but chose in 1820 to move to the estate of his relative, Prince Georgy Gruzinsky, a descendant of Vakhtang VI of Kartli, in Lyskovo." reads like a giant "and then, and then, and then" sentence, that needs to be cleaned up.

Sources/verifiable

Why does note 1 have the title in there when the rest have just the author? seems inconsistent
The cited works appear to appropriately formatted and look appropriate for the subject.
The Ancestry section does not have any sources N

Broad in coverage

It's mainly about his religious work, but that's probably what he was known for, it's not like we have gossip magazine sources from back then so I believe this is probably as broad a coverage we can get.

Netural

Looks like it, no unnecessary embelishments or praises etc.

Stable

Looks to be stable to me, short article history nothing really problematic beyond a move done in 2013 Y

Illustrated / Images

None of the images have Alt texts
"Patriarch Antonius II of Georgia.jpg" - Needs US "public domain" tag added on the image page
"Anton II, Catholicos of Georgia. Signature svg.svg" - Needs US "public domain" tag added on the image
Issues need to be resolved N

General

So I am through with my review, it's not a long article after all. There are issues, but not insurmountable issues. I am putting this on hold for 7 days to allow for updates to be made. Please let me know if there is anything you want me to update. MPJ -US 23:13, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

No activity in 7 days, I will have to fail the article. MPJ-US 11:05, 14 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]