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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:13, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! Will review this. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 06:13, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:23, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • whose scientific name means "our European lion" Is it necessary to mention this in the lead?
Removed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:34, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • The "ferocious" nature of the larvae should be stated a bit more explicitly earlier in the lead. Is it do with predation by the larvae?
It now says "fiercely predatory". Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:34, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Description

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 Done Sainsf <^>Feel at home 13:41, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • Abdomen and thorax are each linked twice.
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • apical veins enclose regular oblong spaces I think apical, oblong and veins need explanations or links.
Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • with the very long hypostigmatic cell (behind the fusion point of Sc and R1) Difficult to understand. Can this be simpler?
Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Adult antlions are rarely seen by day, typically being active at dusk and after dark I think you should first state when they are active, followed by when they are not. Like "they are typically nocturnal, and rarely seen by the day".
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • unique structure known as a "pilula axillaris" Can we add something more on this?
Explained. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link or explain "ventral", "process", "enzyme", "metabolic".
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:16, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Oviposition" is explained under life-cycle but as it is first mentioned here the description should be shifted to this section. Same for "cocoon" and "pupal" (linked later as "pupate")
Done, if I have understood you correctly. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • First mention of "larva" in the main text should be linked.
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:28, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Distribution

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 Done Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:47, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • There are about 2000 species "2,000" as in the lead
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:23, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Dune and scrub may be linked
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:23, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Life-cycle

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 Done Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:46, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • members of the Myrmeleontidae family We have not yet discussed the taxonomy in the main text. Should we say "...family, to which the antlions belong"?
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Abdomen is a duplink
Removed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • The section is named "Life-cycle" but in places you say "lifecycle".
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Link or explain posterior.
Said rear. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Don't link larva here, link it at first mention, under Description.
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:32, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ecology

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 Done Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:47, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • detritus in a hole What is that?
Linked to Wiktionary. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • venom and enzymes , waves detected by receptors Links?
Linked.
  • hind two thoracic segments You mean "two hind thoracic segments"?
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • the antlion larva starts to crawl backwards, using its abdomen as a plough to shovel up the soil. Place a citation at the end of this.
That account is cited to Coelho already. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "ants" is linked twice.
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • "arthropods" is linked twice in this section, both links are duplicate
Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • the tiny larva specializes in very small insects I think we were using British English?
Done. But we Brits often use -ize actually. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:39, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Australian horsefly Scaptia muscula Write " Australian horsefly (Scaptia muscula)" Same for chalcid wasp.
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:40, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Rest

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 Done Sainsf <^>Feel at home 09:47, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

  • The rest of the article looks good. Two suggestions:
  • Should Etymology not be the first section as is usual in articles?
Moved. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:25, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • What is a gallery doing under Etymology?
It isn't any more! Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:25, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

That should be all. Great job, both! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 08:18, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, both of you have been so quick! I am pleased to promote this splendid article. Good luck! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 15:42, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the efficient review, Sainsf. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:52, 28 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
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