Talk:Another Body Murdered/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:00, 2 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Could link Music of Samoa for "Samoan musical culture" in the lead.
One para in the lead is probably sufficient for an article of this modest size.
"Charting" can be linked to Record chart.
"manager Happy Walters. Walters was" repetitive.
"written by Billy Gould, Boo-Yaa T.R.I.B.E., ... Mike Patton and Roddy Bottum, except" all overlinked.
"Samoan a capella" lead said musical culture, not specifically a capella.
"time, Jim Martin, did not wish to participate, Gould" --> "time, Jim Martin did not wish to participate so Gould..."
Our article seems to italicise The A.V. Club. As you have in ref 7 in fact.
ISBNs should be consistently formatted.

Thanks for having a look at this; I've made the recommended fixes; as for the a capella singing, that's what the source specified so I've just called it out specifically in the lead rather than glossing it as before. Standardised the ISBNs as 13-digits but can go the other way if there's a preference. Gʀᴀᴘᴘʟᴇ ^ˣ 11:33, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]