Talk:Anna Maria Rückerschöld/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 18:47, 3 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I propose to take on this review and will study the article in detail in the next day or two. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:47, 3 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

First reading

The article is in general well-written and well-organized but a few points struck me. I will leave the lead for the time being and come back to it later.

"Being the granddaughter of the famous inventor and industrialist Christopher Polhem, Rückerschöld spent part of her childhood with her grandfather at Stjernsund." This is a non sequitur, I don't think she visited her grandfather because of who he was.
"Rückerschöld gave birth to three more children between 1759 and 1765, Maria Fredrica, Christopher. The fourth child, Chierstin, died only seven hours after her birth." - I am confused about the children and their names and think this could be better expressed.
"The family moved to from Sätra gård to Stockholm." - This sentence needs attention.
" Both parents survived their children;" - Do you mean "out-lived"? Although Christopher was presumably lost at sea, you give no indication that the other two died young.
"... but also propagated schools where women could be taught household duties" - Perhaps "promoted" or "proposed" would be better.
"know-how" is a bit casual and unencyclopedic.
"... and replacing imports with locally available products, such as replacing wine with juice or vinegar made from homegrown fruit." - "replace" rather than "replacing" at the beginning of this sentence and perhaps "substituting" (by) the second time it is used.
"... practical advice on efficient household maintenance;" - I think "household management" would be better.
"In the book Rückerschöld continued to propagate the importance" - "promote" would be better here.
"... that served as warning examples of not to neglect housework in favor beautification, reading, religion," - This sentence needs attention, the "of" seems to be in the wrong place.
"... the envy mean-spirited neighbors" - Missing an "of".
"This included not just modes urban households" - Do you mean "modest"?
"The society had issued a contest to that aim over 20 years past" - Perhaps "Twenty years earlier, the society had issued a challenge with this aim" or somesuch.
"... girls should allowed to partake in household work from an early age rather than being pampered and taught impractical traits." - The word "be" has been omitted early in this sentence and "traits" should be replaced by "skills" or "accomplishments" or somesuch.
"the lack of household education could only be outweighed" - Perhaps "eliminated" would be better.
- That's all for now, though I note that the lead, which should be a summary of information more-fully dealt with in the body of the text, contains some information not mentioned elsewhere (the "cautious feminist" bit). Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:36, 4 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA criteria

The article is well written and most of the matters I raised above have been dealt with. It complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
The article uses a limited number of sources which appear to be reliable, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
The article is neutral.
The article is stable. It was created by the nominator in 2009 and few others have edited it since.
The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are in the public domain.

Final assessment - I believe this article meets the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:23, 10 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- I was just about to fix the "catious feminist"-problem when I saw the pass. Still fixed it, though. Thank you very much for the review! Peter ^Isotalo 19:01, 10 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]