Talk:Anna-Marie McLemore/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bennv3771 (talk · contribs) 09:55, 20 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for creating this article and nominating it for GA. Before I do an in-depth review, there are two things that stand out that I would like to see addressed first.

Firstly, the lead is too short and doesn't adequately summarize the article (see MOS:LEAD).
Secondly, the citations don't include sufficient information. You may refer to WP:CITEHOW to see what information to include, but typically besides the url, title and accessdate, the author (if named), work/publisher and date (if there's one) should be included as well. Ref #5 in the current version of the article for example, should ideally include the author (Jeff Giles), the work (The New York Times) and the publication date (2016-11-11). Please do go through all the refs and fill in the information where available.

I'll put the review on hold until these two issues are addressed, then do a more in-depth review after. Bennv3771 (talk) 10:18, 20 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments:

The prose in the career section is choppy and I'm not a fan of the unconnected one-sentence paragraphs.
As stated above, the lead will need to be expanded so as to provide a good summary of the entire article, per MOS:LEAD.
Citation style needs to be consistent through the article, and as stated above, the citations need to provide the reader with more information about the sources (work/publisher date, author etc).
The last two sentences of the career section are unsourced.
Awards section not needed if all the awards are already mentioned in prose in the career section
Nothing about her early life? Particularly important since the article says her work was inspired by her early life and background. Some things that should be covered: where she was born/grew up ("in the foothills of the San Gabriel Mountains"[1]), her Mexican-American family[[2]], her education (attended the University of Southern California on a scholarship[[3]]). Any details out there about how she got into the writing industry?
No copyright violations found.

@Angelcake57: Hi, pinging to see if you're still interested in getting this to GA. This article will need quite some work to get to GA. As such, I'll give it another week or two and if no editor is interested in working on this by then, I'm afraid I'm going to have to fail this nomination. Bennv3771 (talk) 18:48, 27 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Failing this nomination per my comments above. Bennv3771 (talk) 16:11, 9 February 2019 (UTC)[reply]