Talk:Angel of the North/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) 20:34, 1 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments to follow shortly. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 20:34, 1 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done You don't need "pictured" in image captions as a general rule
Done the most significant landmarks which signalled travellers' arrival into Tyneside, when travelling south to north, "when travelling from the south" is shorter and simpler
Done Link A1 and A167 (only) on first mention in the body.
DoneThe intention was for it to act as a "millennial image that would be a marker and guardian for our town" You need to attribute the quote to the speaker
- I've found the original source and author so have cited these.
Done Maybe a couple of words on what Northern Arts is?
Done Quite a few duplicate links. As a rule, we only link terms once in the lead and once in the body. There is a script at User:Evad37/duplinks-alt tha tcna highlight these for you.
DoneThe history jumps quite abruptly from proposals and models to the finished sculpture being transported. Suggest removing the latter to avoid redundancy with the later section.
Done 5.3 metres (17 ft) base use parameter |adj=on to use the adjectival form.
Doneit was decided that the material would not be strong enough Try to avoid the passive voice if it's known who made the decision.
Done other sculptures including The Statue of Liberty "The" is not part of the name (hence the link is a redirect)
Done convenient passage into Tyne and Wear from the South "south" is not a proper noun
Done Additionally, nearby housing estates and commercial areas add to the amount of people who regularly witness the sculpture Suggest something like "the statue can also be seen from nearby housing estates and commercial areas" to reduce verbiage and redundancy.
Done However, this was intentional no need for "however"; there's no contradiction here
Done The sculpture is made of COR-TEN weather-resistant steel and was constructed in three parts you've already established what it's made of
Done The first wing was attached to the body at around 11am MOS:TIME dictates a space (preferably a non-breaking space) between "11" and "am"
Done which Gormley himself called no need for "himself"
Done The Angel has also been suggested to have improved the wellbeing and pride of Gateshead residents By whom?
References:
- Done Per WP:RSP, Bild is a tabloid and considered "generally unreliable"
- Done What makes "AboutBritain.com" a reliable source?
- Done You seem to be using a mix of reference styles. Some multi-page sources (books, journals, etc) are in the bibliography, others not. Some use sfn, some don't.
  - Thank you for raising this, I think I've fixed it by changing to sfn throughout and adding multi-page sources into bibliography.
- Done Titles of books/journal articles should be in title case
- Done Use ISBN13s, not 10s. You can convert them using this site
- Done For Newton & Mills, 93 is the issue number, not the volume number.

This is in very good shape. The above is mostly nit-picking, some of it at a higher level than GA. I don't see any reason this couldn't go on to FAC. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 22:30, 1 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

That's a great help, thankyou. Have made a start on some of the points. --10mmsocket (talk) 06:39, 2 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your swift and comprehensive review @HJ Mitchell, and for taking on the majority of amendments @10mmsocket! I believe I've addressed the remaining points, look forward to hearing from you! Unexpectedlydian (talk) 21:15, 2 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for an easy and enjoyable GA review. I'm happy to pass this. I hope you'll take it to FAC and be justly rewarded for all the hard work you've put into this. HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 12:20, 4 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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