Talk:Angélique Duchemin/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:02, 31 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: BennyOnTheLoose (talk · contribs) 17:56, 26 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 09:38, 21 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Easy one, nice and quick. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:38, 21 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

and became World the World per false titles
It would be good to include that she was born in Thuir in the Early life section, so the claim has an inline cite and the infobox can more effectively be a summary of the body.
Why do you include her mother's surname but not her fathers? The source does not mention her mother's surname.

Added an obituary. Not the best source but hopefully OK with the other source used. If not, I can remove the surname. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:53, 30 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Her brother also took up boxing brothers
age of 7 seven MOS:NUMBERS (not GA requirement)
(nitpicky) begin In 2012 she with Duchemin since it's the start of a new paragraph (not GA requirement)
title with a unanimous decision in a unanimous ?
just call cardiac massage CPR.
seemingly of a pulmonary embolism I don't think this is necessary information given you immediately correct it, and it just seems to be proseline information.
Her father had died after a heart attack in 2013,[7] experienced while he was painting boxing ring posts. died from a heart attack, don't need the word experienced or the comma.
Duchemin during a boxing bout don't need a caption for this image

Other

Sources checked Y (checked as I went through)
Images Y fair use, low quality
Stable Y
Neutral Y
Broad / summary style Y
No OR/COPYVIO Y 13% Earwig, no issues

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 09:38, 21 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, Rollinginhisgrave. I've acted on your comments. Please let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 16:54, 30 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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