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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 03:05, 11 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll give this one a look today.Courcelles 03:05, 11 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

This is in good shape. Images check out as fine. Got a few comments, though.

  • Should this be in Category:World War I battleships of Italy as well?
    • Yes, good catch.
  • What is sourcing this Succeeded by field in the infobox? Neither class named there appears in the body, unless I'm missing something (and ctrl-f is as well.)
  • "bottled up in the Adriatic. After the war, they cruised the Mediterranean" Why link the Med, but not the Adriatic, the one more people are going to need help placing?
    • Probably laziness on my part ;)
  • "The two ships were moored in Taranto on the night of 11–12 November when the British launched a carrier strike on the fleet there; in the resulting Battle of Taranto, Caio Duilio was hit by a torpedo and forced to beach to avoid sinking." Run-on sentence?
  • Above sentence could also specify the year of that battle.
  • "Both ships were scrapped after 1956." Wouldn't saying when they were scrapped make more sense, we're only talking about two ships here?
    • Covered in the table; no need to be specific in the text.
  • "Steam for the turbines was provided by 20 Yarrow boilers, eight of which burned oil and twelve of which burned both oil and coal." Aren't comparable numbers within a sentence supposed to be all written out or all in numerals?
  • How much did they cost to build?
  • "During World War I, a pair of 50-caliber 76-millimeter guns on high-angle mounts were fitted as anti-aircraft (AA) guns. In 1925 the number of 50-caliber 76-millimeter guns was reduced to 13" Reduced to 13 from...?
  • What is sourcing the Builder column in the table?
  • "Instead, Revel decided to implement blockade at" Feels like a word is missing here
  • Would be nice to explain what a MAS is, even briefly.
  • "Caio Duilio helped mediate a dispute over control of İzmir in April 1919" Is that the best word choice -- Captains, Admirals, Ambassadors, etc. can mediate... battleships really can't.
    • Well, I suppose there was no actual mediation - the situation was resolved when the Greeks landed troops. The ship was nevertheless sent to mediate the dispute over control of Izmir; presumably the flag officer aboard would have done the actual mediating, but his name is not mentioned. Parsecboy (talk) 14:49, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]
      • But the wording is the issue, the ship was sent to guard the mediation, the ship was sent to carry the mediator, the ship was sent to be the setting for the mediation, all these things make sense. What doesn't make sense is applying agency to a battleship, the sentence construction just doesn't work. Courcelles 21:54, 14 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, that's all I have to comment on. Courcelles 05:59, 12 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ping.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 06:46, 24 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Courcelles doesn't appear to have been on in about a week - don't know if someone else should take this over or what. Parsecboy (talk) 13:02, 24 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]


  • Sorry to say, that between a trip, an illness, and Wikipedia working like the servers had 386's still in them, this has slipped my mind a bit. I've read it again this evening, and am now passing this article. Courcelles 06:32, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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