Talk:Anže Kopitar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Resolute (talk • contribs • count) 17:12, 4 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments: General

You are mixing American English ("Center") with Commonwealth ("Honour"). Please use one or the other consistently. (actually, on final review, this seems to be the only inconsistency. Please just change one or the other, at your preference)
Images are good
Source 1 needs formatting (or removal - not really any need to cite a player's name in most cases)
Remaining sources appear reliable, but you have "losangeleskings.com" for reference 15, while the rest to the Kings' website is just "lakings.com"
Reference spot checks are good. No OR, no close paraphrasing
Numerous dead links. The newspaper cites are okay (AGF), just remove the link itself. The non-paper links will have to be replaced, however.

What can be said of Kopitar's playing style?

Lead

"Kopitar played junior hockey for his hometown team HK Acroni Jesenice and led his native country before he moved to Sweden at age 16 to play in a better league." - Led his native country in what? Also, "better league" is POV. I know what you are trying to say, and it is worded better in the body, but it might be best to just say he moved to Sweden at this point.
"Kopitar signed a seven year contract extension with the team, which would keep him with the team until 2016." - We cannot assume he will remain a King through to 2016. Just state that the contract runs through to that year.

Personal life

Avoid overlinking. You do not need to link HK Acroni Jesenice twice in close succession, for example. (The link at the top of the European career section is likewise unnecessary). Please check the article as I have found numerous examples throughout.
As a second example, you have double linked English language in this section, but you also did not link the first appearance of the word.

Playing career

"Kopitar was also selected in the CHL Import Draft by the Regina Pats of the Western Hockey League" - As you have not used "CHL" previously, it should be spelled out as Canadian Hockey League in this case. Since you have used "Western Hockey League" in the previous section, you can simplify it to WHL in this instance.
I have often been asked in my own GA noms to name the goaltender the player scored his first goal against, if available. Is it known which Ducks goalie he scored against?
"and named the King's Most Popular Player." - I am not sure "Most Popular Player" is a proper name of an award here, so I don't believe it should be capitalized.
It feels like the article got to 2007-08 in the Kings section then just stopped. A glance at the Kings' media guide tells me there is a lot of missing information from these years:
- 2008-09: Named alternate captain, won Kings scoring leader award, 200th career point. (could also add 200th game, but I personally tend to list only the larger milestones, i.e.: 500th)
- 2009-10: Career highs in goals, assists, points. First King since Robataille to have four consecutive 20-goal seasons to start his career, 100th career goal, first career playoff games
- 2010-11: Played in the All-Star Game and was named most popular and best defensive on the team

International play

"Kopitar scored 6 goals and 8 points in 5 games during the under-18 tournament and finished second overall for goals scored and third for points, leading Slovenia in both categores;[25][26] he had one goal and one assist in five games at the World Juniors.[27]" For consistency, spell out 6, 8, and 5 in the first sentence. Same with the last paragraph on the 2006 world championships. Fifth should be spelled out rather than abbreviated as "5th"
No mention of his 2007 or 2008 participation in tournaments? Those 14 points in 2007 led the tournament and helped Slovenia gain promotion back to the A pool.

Overall

The article is off to a good start, but just died somewhere around 2007. I feel bad failing this given how long it waited at GAN, but there is just too much missing right now. Please continue on, however. Once you have addressed these issues and feel the article is ready, resubmit at GAN and ping me. I will give it a quick, new review at that time. Regards, Reso lute 17:12, 4 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]